rate_review Reviews

^-^ Good one...yummie...

i love it ive read the first and secand one and i think you are a great writer and hope to find more of your work ok

good story

Wow, Wow! Double WOW!

Umm....were they doing it in the hallway? or did I miss something.

Anyways, really great fic, loved the interplay with both of them. Now the second one makes soooo much more sense.


Very erotic fic, please continue to write more, much more.

The idea is nice. There are just a few things I thought I\'d mention. First of all I have to agree that it does indeed feel a bit rushed. Second is, get yourself a beta reader. I think you used the word \"lover\" in almost every sentence when it came to sex - you might want to change that. I don\'t mean to be rude, this is just a advice from someone who has two really great betas and values their opinion. You have talent and I am sure with the help of a skilled beta you will even get better. =) Keep it up!

I agree, it felt rushed, and a beta is needed. So, a series of one shots? Seems to be the thing lately, especially with Severus/Harry and the D/s (not unlike the Shiver Series). Not a bad offering, though.

Mmmm,......will there be more. I\'d like to read about tomorrow night!

Please, Please, Please do a series of one shots!!! I REALLY LOVE YOU WRITING STYLE!! I also like the whole safe word thing, very cute. So please write more. ^____^ PLEASE!!!!

it felt a little rushed at times.. but good nonetheless... :)