rate_review Reviews

please dont take thsi as a flame cos its not. Im trying to help you.

your style seems rushed and everything moves soo fast. I suggest spacing your story too, so it's easier to read. Both of your characters seem really out of character. Maybe if you space out your story and add some more to the actual story and the actions they do, you make it seem like they only kiss and sleep ect. theres no times where the characters pause or do something besides move to do something important to the story, remember we dont just sit stilla dn stuff like that. I think alot more people would enjoy your story if you changed a few small things. Good luck with your story.

Okay, your story has a good concept, a used concept, but a good one. But why does Harry know more about being a wizard then Draco? Draco seems really OOC. Also you need to work on showing not telling when you are writing. It makes for a more interesting story.

ummmmmm........ what does emancipated mean? cuz i got no clue lol! but, yea, i really like this story. so keep update soon :D :) :D :) :D

Can\'t wait for chapter 4!

Oh, you are so evil. you left the action behind! I need update. please

great story

Ron is such a prat! I hope he doesn\'t ruin Harry\'s birthday! They did check into how to have sex didn\'t they? I hope Draco asked Severus for information. Can\'t wait for chapter 3!