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October 1, 2019 at 12:00 AM
OOC I don't think you read the characters as intelligent as they are you seem kind of dumb down slightly but being that you are not a professional writer probably it's actually pretty good Just like problems with here and there but if you kept writing after this I haven't looked to see if you have other work but maybe you haven't concern you stopped or that maybe you got better and you didn't like this but it's pretty good so you should finished it but May have been left because there are some slightly less but really good for Fan Fic at least you didn't go overboard with the Yuma mother instead of your mother stuff there was a few but it was good
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October 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your last update was on November 13th 2006. I DO hope that you will be updating very soon. Your readers are looking forward to the rest of it. Please try and post the whole thing if possible. Can't wait to see the rest. Please get to that keyboard and get it burning up with your story.
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September 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I do hope that you will be updating very soon, it would be a shame to let it go. Please do an update soon, many of your readers will be very happy. Don't let the last few books influence your writing. Make it AU now but PLEASE finish the story !!!
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August 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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November 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story so far. I need MORE!!!!
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November 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please update!
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow i love it .. please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now
angel
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like the concept...but, i think that Severus is a little out of character. Not that I don't like it, but, I think he needs a little more of his wonderful wicked streak.
Keep writing
Keep writing
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW. it has been a long time sense you updated this story. i am glad you have not abonded it! :) i am looking froward to reading it, please don't take so long in updates! (or i might be dead before you finish it ;))
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
A bit rough but other then that i like it.