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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love Snape!!!!I love Snape!!!!I like your story so far.
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG! How could he do that! I can\'t wait to read more! Great start. please update soon.
Tiffany
Tiffany
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You need a beta, the mistakes are numerous and distracting. The plot however is based on a sound premise, and it could be a very good story, but unless you get a beta and your spelling and grammar sorted then I don\'t think I will continue reading.
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good story so far...but could I suggest perhaps getting a beta? there are a few spelling and gramatical errors. nothing major. other then that, keep writing :)
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It\'s Grimmauld Place, not Grimwald among other mistakes too numerous to mention. I don\'t think I\'m being too critical, but I don\'t think I\'ll bother following your story because of that.