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for He Tries Too Hard

by SatanicxHeartxo

person Daisy Mae
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Needs a good beta. (1) Lacks continuity of grammar. (2) If the character is from Russia, his thoughts, language, etc., would be a bit more towards his primary language and not the author's.

The story could be good with the help of a beta.
person _Graphophobic_
schedule December 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god.
I hate it.

Topher, how could your beautiful hands have produced such filthy crap?
Jesus will be very disappointed in you.
-glares-
Terrible.
Hatred.
Hate.
Hate.
Hate.
Hate.
Hate.
Hate.

Just kidding. ^^; It's cool - and this is Kai, by the was. <3 I love you.

(Nice... Anton in the story makes me go... "Lyk ong!!!!!111oneoneoneone" Like Alex. <3 )

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