rate_review Reviews

So good, love the idea of Harry being inside Lucius.

If you ever have time, please continue.

PLEASE!!!!

ohhh, great story!! I can't wait for the next chapter. I love your interpretation of the characters!! They're so awesome. And I hope you've had an uber christmas!

Ch. 8 A fair chapter, although the smoking is still a pain. Smoking in bed is incredibly dangerous! You'd think Snape would point that out at least.

Interesting... please continue. I like how you have incorperated the future Snape to remember the stuff that had happened when Harry was Lucius.

Now here is something I truly have not read before.

Ch. 7 I will accept (grudgingly) your Harry's addiction to fags and drink. As for your other comments about my critique: proper spelling, punctuation and grammar ARE important. Excuses such as improper or non-existent education are unacceptable. Rotten examples of any of these things slow down reading, break the flow of a story and are just depressing. Anything worth doing is worth doing well. Otherwise, why bother? (You spell "surreptiously" correctly but replace "head" with "he'd"?!? That's a bizarre mistake even for a lousy speller. Oy.)

As for thinking you wrote that Severus is older than Lucius, I apologize. I mis-understood a piece of dialogue in chapter 3. I thought you were referring to Lucius when you actually meant Harry.

so far i like it just hope that if i get hook you will finish the story because alot of wirter's don't so let see if i like this journey

so far am hook i do hope that harry try's to be nice 'er to sev i don't know i just want harry and sev together

xD Here and waiting for an update. Just wanted to let you know. ^.^

lovely turn on the time turner fic in giving harry lucius' body. there is no need to be overly strict with logic or grammar methinks (but maybe a beta is a good idea? it's also nice to have someone testread stuff and develop plot ideas with?) :D

anway i'm here for the sex hee! and the sex is delicious in your fic! the more the better.

did you state het and lm/nm (or actually hp/nm) in your warnings? i don't mind AT ALL :D - but then i don't mind firenze/squid either.

there are some readers who cannot bear to read about female genitals in action - so maybe they'd need a fair warning.

your smoking, drinking harry isn't that bad either. (although i do agree with queen b. - it's not really jkr's harry - but then i like your harry as well!)

i hope you continue with this fun story - a young snape in distress is always great to read and you write him very beautifully!