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October 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Please update soon.
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August 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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August 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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July 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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July 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting concept. =) *kidnaps it* >.> ~.'
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July 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
eh, not bad i 'spose, especially for your first. but there were quite a few grammar mistakes and other mistakes in general. the one i remember most is when you said she was 39 moths pregnant or something like that, seems like you said 39 months, which...well, that's over 2 years. if it was 3 months, she wouldn't be as big as you described, and if it was 9 months, she probably wouldn't have had enough energy for sex. but since its a fic, that could slide. so yeah. that's about it.
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July 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Thanks, I meant weeks, and I reduced it to 37 weeks, though couples do have sex @ and beyond 9 months to induce labor, especially when past due. ^_^
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July 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good plot but you definately need to get a beta, there are a lot of grammatical errors which make it very difficult to read. Once you "clean it up" it would be a good fic for a first effort. Toodles.