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August 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can please write some more chapters?
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was beautifully written. You handled rather dark subject matter very well without going for over the top melodrama.
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August 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh the angst! It was good. Keep up the writing! :)
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August 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i am definitely a sucker for the angsty ones, and this was no exception, the story is great.
constructive criticism:watch your tense. generally when you write, you use past tense. it's ok to use present tense in contemporary fiction, however you need to stick to a tense. in the first paragraph you use present tense, so everything else needs to be either present tense, or that part needs to switch to past tense. i can beta read for you if you like.
constructive criticism:watch your tense. generally when you write, you use past tense. it's ok to use present tense in contemporary fiction, however you need to stick to a tense. in the first paragraph you use present tense, so everything else needs to be either present tense, or that part needs to switch to past tense. i can beta read for you if you like.