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Pretty catchy little story. I'm sad everyone else is dead but it sure makes it more understandable how Harry gets past his anger.

Another superb chapter! I can't wait to see how the meeting goes with Rita Skeeter.~Sophia

An excellent chapter! I can't wait to see what they have in mind for Fudge and how it plays out. Keep up the wonderful work!!

have the day off and am doing some reading like what you've done so far!

Hi...Brilliant new chapter, thoroughly enjoyed. Congratulations at the wonderful kiss
sequence, timed perfectly.

One tiny thing, just watch, the text doesn't matter.

"Severus I just want you to help me, by being my first...Severus speak to me." Harry pleaded.
"What are you on about...boy I am to old to be your first, *God knows I would crave for you firsting." These two conversations are to much scunched together...

Good, but better with more spaces inbetween. I do not know what format you post in, but, it tends to end up very tight together, so if your posting is just posting like this, just leave two states between a sentence or other conversations. Just like these....

"Severus I just want you to help me, by being my first...Severus speak to me," Harry Pleaded.

"What are you talking about?...Boy I am to old to be your first!" Severus said and then thought, *Merlin knows I would crave to be your firsting.*


However, just keep writing, I will willingly readjust the story within my head

Just love the story, Blessings of Heath and Happiness for the New year. Donavon.

An excellent chapter! I can't wait to see how they go about bringing Fudge and all of his supporters down. Keep up the marvelous work!!

cant wait for more!!!!!!!! I know its a sucky review but i dont have a lot of time ill do better next time

It's a very good story, but, the chapters need to be longer.

However, I have managed to read the whole posted chapters, and
they are very good.

You asked a question in the previous chapter, what should happen
to Fudge? Well I certainly don't think Severus should feed from
him, it would give him severe stomach ache. I think you should
follow Ninian's path, entomb him, to living hell.

Unfortunately it is not my story, think of your own demise.

Looking forward to a longer update. Best wishes,

Donavon.

Oh please, do *not* put Fudge on the menu! :shudder: That would give poor Sev indigestion or a really bad case of food poisoning. Even a starving vampire would have second -- and maybe even third and fourth -- thoughts about feeding off that nasty little toad. Ick! I'm quite sure Snape has much better taste. ;-)

Looking forward to next chapter. Happy Holidays!

Yay! Fudge is dinner for someone, lol. An excellent chapter! Albus sure thought of everything (I hope).