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This is already looking much better than your original version. No offense, but the other one is a bit underdeveloped and hard to follow. It didn't seem to be going anywhere. This version isn't going to have that Katie girl in it again, is it? Once again, no offense, but I'm not a fan of Mary Sues and yours was no exception. They really drag a story down. I hope you leave her out this time.
Can't wait to see what Kingsley does with Harry. And it's Severus/Harry/Charlie? Wow, that's a pairing I've never seen before, but I'm oddly excited about it. Who makes the move on who first? Is everyone eager for the relationship or will there be some reluctance on anyone's part? On that note, are the three of them going to share nicely or will there be some jealously showing? Can't wait to see this dynamic develop. Update soon.

good start, seems very interesting (haven't read the other version, so can't tell more!)
and very interesting choice of pairings too!

I like it

heyla ill definitely be reading both versions. This one had a fantastic begginning and i think doing both is a brill idea.

wow that was great i love it .. i cant wait in till the next time you update .. later for now

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