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Very nice start. I can't wait to read an elaboration of this. I like the way it is written and everything. If you need a beta or anything just email me. Can't wait for more :)

Ja ne
Kireania

Ps my email is akitosgoddess429@comcast.net

What do you mean, your English is flawless.
As English is not my first language either, I know how hard it is to write something that captures a mind instantly.
But you did quite well on your first try.
Because my e-mail keeps "hidden" (although I changed it several times now...*grumble*), I will post it here, if you wish to reply.
heksy69@planet.nl
Keep up the good work.

That was wonderful! I look forward to the story!

Different. I have a story named 'Changed', so when I saw this, I *almost* thought this was a copy/plagerized version of my work...but it's not! You're English is fine, but maybe you should request help of a Beta. I'll gladly help you; I Beta for two other people (I used to Beta for three, but one stopped writing). If not, then that's fine; you can request a Beta in the Beta section of the Main Categories.

Slashy Snitch

P.S: Great story so far, though you might wanted to have used more names, even though we know who they were. Just a thought!