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Alright, the story line is fairly interesting and could definitely be continued. However, I think your excuses of "not being interested in English when in school" is complete crap. Why are you writing a story in English, then? Get a beta (one that DOES reply you), or at least make an effort to write something not TOO mistake-riddled. The story is really good, and it just seems such a waste that the grammar/spelling mistakes are detracting from the story.
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dark_Angel

oooo! cant wait for more! i love dom!draco and sub!harry!!! and spelling is not bad! i can undersatnd and read everything just fine so dont worry :)

Hi there, I really like your story and am looking forward to how their relationship will develop. I'm German and even though I liked English at school (a looooong time ago) I certainly do make a lot of mistakes, too. But never mind. If/when you find a beta and correct/reedit your chapters, maybe you could correct the answer Harry gives in this last 4th chapter. Wasn't he supposed to say: "They are gone" instead of "is no more"? But I only realised because I started to read again from chapter 1. Have fun writing and let the muse kiss you - and I hope very much for a "happy ending" as I love those

I like this story. I like the direction it is going and if you would like some help I would be more than glad to help you. I would be more than willing to Beta for you if you would like. If so than please e-mail me and let me know! I hope to hear from you!

Im loving this fic. the only little thing i have noticed, in the first chapters Harry's reply to "death eater" is "They are gone" yet in chapter 4 he says "Is no more".

Just thought id point it out :)

You have it right so far. It is always the bottom that should set the limits in that kind of relationship.

it would be a good read
but there really are lots of mistakes, with spelling and grammar.
i seriously suggest u get at least a couple people to beta ur work.
because as reviwers we are not obligated to point out every mistake.
so beta is the way to go.
good luck.

please please please please tell me you're going to continue. i want more!! more more more!!!!!!!!

I'm happy you did update. I look forward to the next chapter to.

oh god, chapter 3 was really hot! I hope there's much more of Thomas... heh heh