rate_review Reviews

Actually I really like it. I love the idea, I had a similar one but couldn't think of it even to the point you got too. I don't know what you think could be wrong. Perhaps that Lupin's reasoning is a bit off. How a couple hours becomes 4yrs... yeah that's a bit off. Maybe if a bond was expressed in those first couple of hours or days? I don't know, either way I love it as it is.

It's an interesting premise. The only logic fault I can see in it so far is that Draco's black eye would have been healed with a charm, either by Narcissa, or a house elf ordered to do so by her. Lacking that, a glamour could have hidden the damage. Far easier than taking the time to do such a good make-up job. Instead of seeing bruises, Remus' motivation could be that he smells Draco's fear anytime he mentions his mother (and/or father).

Other than that, it's well written, good spelling and grammar.