rate_review Reviews

Wow. Poor Severus now he is feeling the guilt and Hermione is in no condition to help yet. Looking forward to reading more.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapter?

I like the story much better without the song. Not only does it flow better, but the song was taking up the story. I think a line or two from a song in a song fic is Ok, but too much will take over the story.

This is a very interesting plot idea, and I can see that it has the potential to be a really BIG emotional story. (I like a little angst here and there) But I do have one request... If I continue to read it, I'm gonna need a happy ending. Well written, and only a few errors that I noticed, so all in all, I'd give you a 4 for presentation. Good job!

Keep writing and I'll keep reading!

Shiloh Darke

much better flow this way. nothing against having the song lyrics included, maybe a directly applicable portion at the start or end to highlight the angst.