rate_review Reviews

Who is Pavtal? I understand that you spelled Parvati's name wrong...but honestly...who is Pavtal? Parvati's sister is Padma. Also, this is very confusing. I originally opened the story to leave you a review explaining the name issue, but after reading it, there are also major grammar errors. Please re-read your work, or employ the services of a beta.

sorry, way too confusing for it to be any good. Not really flaming, but maybe just try reading it again and try to figure out how to clean it up a bit.
Interesting idea though.