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for A day in paradise

by godgrantmestrength

person Utopia
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This needs a lot of formatting; you need spaces between the full stop and the start of the next sentence and new speakers need a new line. The large paragraph is incredibly off putting and a struggle to read.
schedule October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Not bad at all! I'm not generally a Harry/Hermione shipper but your story was hot.

You reviewed my story 'The Wedding' and I want to ask you a question but I can't find any contact information for you. Can you email me at ratscentral@optusnet.com.au ? Thanks
person Anon
schedule September 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Anon
schedule September 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Try adding more thoughts and feelings.

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