rate_review Reviews

I just couldn't read more than a few sentences because the grammar sucked so badly it made me cringe. You violated the language...

I believe you were looking to use "does" as opposed to "do". I don't know if English is your first language or not, but it is important to look at grammar. I didn't read any further than that because it pulled me away from the story.

Punctuation, grammar, spelling, composition !!!!!!!!!!! A good idea does not make a good story without these things.

the developpement of the story seemed to be a bit fast. like one moment harry hates snape and draco, then he suddenly loves them. the tenses of verbs were sometimes fucked up too. like using opens instead of opened. the sex was good though and since this is a PWP then the story doesn`t really matter, but if you improve it, the story as a whole has alot of potential. just trying to give some constructive criticism.