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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, nice start, little short. Few "teacher notes":
vial - a container
vile - evil, nasty
Worse thAn, then indicates time; than indicates a relationship between two items.
their backS
Elders, capital E in this case.
Hope to see more, thanks for sharing. Pitt
vial - a container
vile - evil, nasty
Worse thAn, then indicates time; than indicates a relationship between two items.
their backS
Elders, capital E in this case.
Hope to see more, thanks for sharing. Pitt
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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oooooohhh I'm so definitely intrigued. Want more!
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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
...it is too short for a wonderful start, please update soon...
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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good start!
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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very good start.
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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like the sound of it. I love a good creature story with a bottom Harry! You had a few grammar issues but other than that it was good. If your looking for a beta for your future chapters I would be happy to do so just send me an email shinji.fukushima@yahoo.com.
Looking forward to chapter 1!!
Looking forward to chapter 1!!
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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
cool story
i love it
i love it
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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh thank you Jesus. When I saw Bottom!Harry in your summary I about cried. Ever since the 7th book every fanfic I read has Top!Harry. Those don't make me happy. Thank you so very much. I love you so much right now.
This looks really interesting. Awesome-tastically interesting. I'm waiting happily with my imaginary dog tail wagging. I hope you update soon.
~Canis
This looks really interesting. Awesome-tastically interesting. I'm waiting happily with my imaginary dog tail wagging. I hope you update soon.
~Canis
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December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I'm hooked.
Excellent so far. Please continue, because I'm sure that you will explain everything in the coming chapters.
Nemesis ^_~
Excellent so far. Please continue, because I'm sure that you will explain everything in the coming chapters.
Nemesis ^_~