rate_review Reviews

all good except chpt 4 sucked.

I thought chapter 4 was well written but there were two things I didn't like about it in the context of what Ms_Figg wrote in the first chapter and that was that at one time Veelas were bloodthirsty and shot arrows at men and carried off children. I looked on the web and saw Ms_Figg must have researched this. So their having such a wonderful society doesn't mesh with their dark history and now they are like all perfect MarySues who people just think have bad points. I am hoping that someone will insert something not quite right about this utopia otherwise it is going to get dull fast. The other thing I didn't like was that Hermione had sexual relations with the Veelas without protest or any resistance. I think it is because when I usually see Ms_Figg's name on a story I know usually it will be strictly SS/HG sexually unless she states otherwise in the summary or author notes but I guess that's something left to the other contributors but I hope in the future the authors of chapters will warn if there are scenes between Severus or Hermione and other characters since I prefer just HG/SS. I like the idea of other authors contributing though. I just wanted to add my two knuts.

Just a note. I don't plan on doing any editing of anyone's chapters. I might, but don't plan on it. ;) If a chapter is too bad, it might get deleted though. So if you add a chapter please make sure it is readable for others. That said, I hope somebody adds to this. :)