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July 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this is a great story. i do hope you will update soon.
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April 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
you've got a great story here. its not too dark and although i really wasn't a fan of hermione and snape i think you may have changed my mind =) please continue the story...i would really love to know how it ends! until then...happy writing!!!
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April 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
brilliant writing wish! i love this!
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April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's OK sweetie, you did a marvelous job of picking your first lemon! x
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April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
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I have a very clear image in my mind, and I'm not sure if it was what you meant for the reader to imagine...
I can see from Severus's point of view: Hermione stood before the fire, the dim flickering light from the candles surrounding the room making her scantily clad body glow golden; the silky fabric of her knickers reflecting the flickering light back. I can imagine her surrounded by a halo of light from the fire behind her, like the penumbra of a solar eclipse.
I'm not sure if that was what you wanted us to see, but it is what I saw in my mind.
I have a very clear image in my mind, and I'm not sure if it was what you meant for the reader to imagine...
I can see from Severus's point of view: Hermione stood before the fire, the dim flickering light from the candles surrounding the room making her scantily clad body glow golden; the silky fabric of her knickers reflecting the flickering light back. I can imagine her surrounded by a halo of light from the fire behind her, like the penumbra of a solar eclipse.
I'm not sure if that was what you wanted us to see, but it is what I saw in my mind.
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April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well, I guess letting your innocence pay for uni is better than someone I knew who pole danced to pay for hers! lol!
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April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
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he he! Your fic is one of those where I REALLY take note of the tiny details, as well as the big picture! There isn't many that do that to me.
I had to laugh that Severus told her she was perfect... whilst staring at her breasts! lol! Typical bloke!
he he! Your fic is one of those where I REALLY take note of the tiny details, as well as the big picture! There isn't many that do that to me.
I had to laugh that Severus told her she was perfect... whilst staring at her breasts! lol! Typical bloke!
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April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sperm can survive for three days, and it's one heck of a swim for them! (Hence emergency contraception working for upto 72hrs). Surely he could slip her something in her tea to prevent pregnancy? Trapping her with a child won't gain him any favours - yes, Hermione would make a brilliant mother, but it should be her choice to be so (in my opinion). I'm looking forward to him telling her it was a painkiller and fertility aid he gave her!
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April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm so glad you're updating this story, I really love it... love that they love each other and haven;t said it yet, very sweet!!!
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April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that's really well written. I read the whole fic straight through and enjoyed it very much indeed. I did find the gentle sloppy Snape a bit annoying, but then the Dark Snape took over, and it was pure brilliance. Update soon... I can't wait to see what happens next.
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