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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
good chapter.
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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
good chapter.
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May 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Um its good so far the second chapter needs a beta....
However harry seems to be a lot more level minded and he didn't even tell his best friends about his fae-ness thats kindda' odd
Also i'd suggest more of a description of himself honestly if i suddenly sprouted wings I'd want to look at them, wouldn't you? so maybe add a part in here where he looks at them? I mean cause they're obviously visable or something cause everyone knew what it was when they looked at his back...
anyway good luck, write on
~Eros
However harry seems to be a lot more level minded and he didn't even tell his best friends about his fae-ness thats kindda' odd
Also i'd suggest more of a description of himself honestly if i suddenly sprouted wings I'd want to look at them, wouldn't you? so maybe add a part in here where he looks at them? I mean cause they're obviously visable or something cause everyone knew what it was when they looked at his back...
anyway good luck, write on
~Eros
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May 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sooo need chapter 3! What a way to find out you're someone's mate! What is Harry's animagus?
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May 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
great start, really peeked my interest, can't wait to see what you di wuth the next chapter
oneor two little spelling errors, nothing major that can't wait
oneor two little spelling errors, nothing major that can't wait
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May 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oooh i love it and need more. what about 'twisted illsion'? i love that one also.