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That guy is one /SICK/ bastard!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Please write more!!!!

update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!

wow, this is a really vicious side of dumbledore.....i like it!!! he's held too highly and is usually thought to be the good guy, and i luuuuv writers who choose to evilize him!!! keep up the good work, and i think it would be adorable for harry to change a little bit and have a little of tom's natural beauty to his face after voldie is turned back so that sevvie is inescapably drawn to him...*evil smirk*...well, here's some nummy homemade cookies just for you, lol!! -the Fuu

Only just finished chapter three (so can't comment on the whole thing yet) but you have a brilliant story with a lot of potential, I love the few twists you took with it and how they seem to fit quite well and seem quite plausible. . . You have an emotional element and the chapters are of good length, it's very enjoyable to read :)

However a couple things bug me a little, first I don't think you fully thought out Dumbledore's motives, he seems to be evil for the sake of being evil and he appears like a pantomime character because of this, it detracts from the story and breaks the realism. I mean I read 'destroy every living thing!' complete with evil laugh and the suspension of disbelief was completley shattered, I was left going 'what the heck?' and shaking my head in confusion. Secondly Harry's relationship with his father moves a little fast, he's also incredibly quick to trust Lucius and Voldermort considering - not only had he hated them for years - but also Dumblodore betrayed him only recently in the worst possibly way.

I really do look forward to more and I shall read the rest shortly - good luck with writing and great job so far. This has a lot of potential.

You should have James have more mental issues. To be stuck in a dark room with no one for company except for an insane old man for 16 years would make anyone insane. James seems a little to much together for me. Also you should have a better explanation on why james was stuck there for so long when it was so easy for Harry to pull him out.

Otherwise, it has started out well, and I hope to see a new chapter soon.

That was crazy. But good in a sort of sick way. Keep going.

I like the story and hope to read more.
Please update.

hmm... definately interesting. I've seen many harry is voldie's son stories but never with James Potter as the other parent.

Kindly email me when you update? I don't want to miss any action; gypsy_willow90@hotmail.com

More please. This is rather interesting. Please update as soon as possible.

i like it ihope that james gets to see voldy before he turns back and sev and harry get toether soon good job