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omg i thought u were gonna kill him lol i was fixin to be so mad at u lol. i loved how u twisted the story like that! u r great!

Ok that was scary in the beginning of the chapter, but a Lovely ending to the story!

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Nice job so far. I am a bit disappointed in this suicide attempt though. (Although it is seemingly not just an attempt right now). I agree with seraphiccandy, I suppose. Despite that, I like the early part of this story...alot. It seemed interesting for Harry to have needed pain to feel, and you wrote it in a believable fashion. I liked the idea of the clinic that would hopefully help wean off these masochistic tendencies. I am hoping for the relationship between the pair, assuming Harry will survive, to be something a bit more fiery, rather than just fluff, as it will take a great deal to get these two back on track. I look forward to more.

ah,this story was doing so well and then you decided on a suicide attempt* smacks forehead* why,why,why? Also the way you have constructed your characters is good but they need to have more personality flaws. I know its hard to do this but it makes your characters more human istead of putting in Soap-opera type themes and reactions. He doesn't love me,gah, I shall have to do myself in. No, go be happy with another while i suffer in the gloooooooom!!!He doesn't really love me !!!*run away*seeeeeeeen it.You have constructed perfect characters who react to an imperfect environment and this is their downfall. What you really want to do is make your characters more imperfect. Like you could have made Draco insult Harry and NOT regret it. An inherent fault but something which is also inherently human.Although your plotline and your wording is new your characters are not.Draco is the pretictable slytherin sex god with intimcy issues and Harry is the predictable angsty emo extremely hansome guy.I know thats the type of character a story with this kind of plotline requires but you could make Draco look completly crap one morning or Harry fart in bed or something that we can identify with their human side. I understand how hard it is to not make ur characters perfect. We all want perfect characters but the point is that they don't exist...please continue writing though. You have excellent ideas for plotlines and if you keep writing I'm sure you will improve. And of course I'll continue reading. Although this last chapter really made me cringe-I'm predicting a near-death save for harry, an emotional outpouring of both their true feelings and they lived happily ever after?:P I am really enjoying your other storys though...p.s, dis is notta flame. Just constructive critism.

Thats the end?? (I'm hoping there's more)....I'm bummed....literally.
Wonderfully written as all you chapters were in this tale.

:O Oh my god!
And you say there is a epilogue left? hmm.. interesting.. This is so good. I look forward to the end so badly now.

Hello...

First time to review your story...

All I can say is:

This is bloody fantastic!!

I really love the story so far...but please, don

MORE! ARG! Cliffhangers!!!! Grrrrrrrrrrrrr...

Sooo need chapter 14!!!!