rate_review Reviews

have harry catch him

I feel like this has some interesting ideas but you don't go into enough depth. It would improve the story if you elaborate more on his feelings for Ginny, I think. I didn't really like the fact that Ginny seemed SO naive and inexperienced - it made it feel too creepy/inappropriate. It would've been better if Sirius started out thinking she was this inexperienced little flower and she turned out to actually be a feisty little minx, totally trying to seduce him from the start. It also seems too convenient that Harry's cheating on her. Like it's just there as a justification for Sirius fucking Ginny. If he's gonna be a bastard, you shouldn't make Harry out to be the villain.

Finally, watch the verb tenses - you switch from past to present tense quite a few times.

Oh wow, that was so hot! I love the whole, 'I'm a bastard' idea by the way. You actually made me enjoy the Lily/Sirius which is a couple that I've never gotten into. I love love loved the Ginny/Sirius though! I encourage you to write more Ginny/Sirius; I would definitely read and review if you did =D Good work.

Oh my god! That was amazing. Just gonna leave it right there. LOL

Very good written Smut..Simply Loved it.

Parselmaster

Wow! I've never gotten a compliment like that! Thank you!

OH.
MY.
FUCKING.
GOODNESS.

That was one of the hottest fics I've read, ever. And I read a lot of smut.