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Chapter 2-
I don't understand why the Shrieking Shack Night Club is concealed. Hogsmeade is a wizarding-only town. There's no reason to draw attention away from it? Or is it supposed to be like an underground speakeasy?

This is very different, but different is good. I think you have a unique voice and should continue writing.

Chapter 3-
What a perfect song you picked out for Severus, and I can imagine his voice carrying it well.

And you left us with a nasty little cliffhanger. I can't wait to learn what his reaction will be to being discovered.

I am enjoying this story so far. It's a really good start. I look forward to loads more soon! Thanks. HG4eva

That is quite a way to end chapter three...I cannot wait to read how you work that 'meeting of eyes' in to chapter 4!

Very good start. I would not have realized that Engish was a second language for you. Keep up the great work