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for Drunken Mistakes

by MrsRupertGrint1769

schedule January 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like this so far, but I do think you need to flesh it out a bit, you have a nice smooth style, I find myself wanting and expecting more, some writers get too caught up in telling what they are wearing or some such nonsense, I mean more what they are thinking and feeling, which you are doing a good job of so far, I just think you could go a little further with that to make it flow a little more smoothly, so that is the reason for my comment. Either that or else give us more chapters quickly. lol. I'll watch for updates, this is very good. I only ever comment with suggestions when I feel it could very easily be taken to the next level, you are at that point.
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schedule January 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It is not crappy. It is short but not everybody likes writing long chapters. I would like to know a little about how Draco fell in love with Harry and how do they interact right now in school. Do they still fight all the time? I guess that is something that can be explained in the owls. I will just have to wait.... I hate waiting :(

I look forward to your next post.
schedule January 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
damn right he has it bad, but that's oh so good
schedule January 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like the solo smut! Thanks for the update.
schedule January 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is pretty interesting. I'd definitely like to see this continue.
schedule January 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
more please!!!!!
schedule January 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting. I just stumbled upon this. I await to see what happens next. Good job.
schedule January 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh poor Harry! Soooo need chapter 3!!!
schedule January 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OH wow! Fantastic!!! I loved the original but this is... I'm dying for more! Chapter 2 please!!!
schedule January 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
love the story so far can't wait for the next chapter

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