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March 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OMG I hope you update I Love it!!!
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February 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Excellent story so far, I can't wait to read more!
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January 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is an amazing story. I love the way you write.
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October 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Just a little typo, but mildy annoying - it is Privet Drive, not Private Drive. A Dark Lord who is not evil but kills - or tries to kill - babies? That is rather a difficult idea to make remotely believable. LOL
However lack of conviction aside, I intend to keep reading, so you must be doing something, or some things, right!
However lack of conviction aside, I intend to keep reading, so you must be doing something, or some things, right!
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October 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hope you don't mind an on-the-fly beta again, but the word 'stationary' means standing still, the word for the paper one writes on is 'stationery'.
Also, here:
Also, here:
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September 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Will there be more? Soon?
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September 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You said you wanted mistakes brought to your attention for chapter 18
I copied the whole section so you can read the first section
that says he removed the underwear completed but then in the next section its back on for a few setions until its removed again....
He pulled the underwear down the rest of the way, letting it fall to the floor before helping her up to sit on his lap, legs on either side of his facing towards him, her back resting on the edge of the desk.
Severus took in the tear streaked face and gently wiped away the tears before reaching around to pick up the lollypop. He lifted it to her mouth and ran it over a pink swollen lip, she tentatively opened her mouth to accept the treat and he pushed it in slowly, running it over her tongue. He let his other hand wander slowly up her leg inching under the skirt to rub against the cotton covered hardness.
Harry moaned lifting his body to press into the Potions Master
I copied the whole section so you can read the first section
that says he removed the underwear completed but then in the next section its back on for a few setions until its removed again....
He pulled the underwear down the rest of the way, letting it fall to the floor before helping her up to sit on his lap, legs on either side of his facing towards him, her back resting on the edge of the desk.
Severus took in the tear streaked face and gently wiped away the tears before reaching around to pick up the lollypop. He lifted it to her mouth and ran it over a pink swollen lip, she tentatively opened her mouth to accept the treat and he pushed it in slowly, running it over her tongue. He let his other hand wander slowly up her leg inching under the skirt to rub against the cotton covered hardness.
Harry moaned lifting his body to press into the Potions Master
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September 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I do love this story and can not wait for the next installment.
Keep up the good work hun you are doing a great job.
Keep up the good work hun you are doing a great job.
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September 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Also, don't know if I already asked this, but do we finally get to have Sev find out about Harry's little... Issue??
And also, would it be okay if I referenced the Mas-Bastet in Further Trouble with Mates? I don't want to use it for a character, but I would like to mention it, if I end up writing the scene I'm contemplating.
And also, would it be okay if I referenced the Mas-Bastet in Further Trouble with Mates? I don't want to use it for a character, but I would like to mention it, if I end up writing the scene I'm contemplating.
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September 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really never know what to say in reviews, but I really like this story, most stories I wait until they're completed to even look at, but this one is really good. When is Severus going to find out about Harry? Soon? Please?