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February 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(review of chapter 55) What a dark chapter! It is hard to read because it is graphic (easy to envision). Plus it puts our main characters (Snapes & Draco) in nearly irredeemable status.
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February 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(review of chapter 57) Whew! I loved the ending - particularly Hermione's letter. I guess the 3 deatheaters are redeemable. You sure can play with the Readers' emotions well, authoress!
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February 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(chapter 27 review) Good set up, using the meeting with Severus as a means to establish their relationship (based on family and the power struggle between them). Well written and interesting. I like that Hermione trust her over Severus at this point.
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February 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(review of chapter 30) That was brilliant! I loved the scene of Severus's death and Sarah's retrieval of the upper hand in their power struggle. I love your portrayal of Death.
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February 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(review of chapter 34) I'm really enjoying this tale. There is one point of contention that I would gently like to mention concerning your dialogue: overuse of exclamation points.
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February 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm liking your story. I don't mind that Hermione has not yet made her entrance. It's refreshing to read an original plot. I like your use of the Assassins and the Master Assassin; I'm sure they will make formidable foes to Voldemort. I like learning about her as well through the view points of other characters. I especially loved your characterization of Death (I love Piers Anthony stories). It would be awesome if he could have a greater presence in the story.
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January 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow so many things in one chapter........ Lovely!
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January 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Finally they are a little safe, now we concentrate on kicking Voldie's butt with a lot of pain.
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January 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful!
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January 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
WOW, love the drama!