rate_review Reviews

I am really enjoying your story. If you're still looking fir a beta I would really love to do the job. Please let me know if the position is still available.

Many, way to many spelling errors, and grammatical mistakes. Perhaps a beta might be helpful? Also, in chapter 3, just for further reference, hitting one's head on a wall, will not cause breathing to stop; unless there was an underlying condition, or the potions mishap caused it. Loss of blood and the trauma of hitting the back of a head can cause concussion, vomiting, unconsciousness, dizziness, pale/ashen skin and the possibility of heart complications, but not the loss of breathing.

I like this story, but it needs work. I only say all this because I like where it is going, and I want you to become more knowledgeable at your writing. Props to you. Keep going.

Not a bad story, but it needs some beta work. You have grammatical and spelling errors which make parts of it hard to read. The story itself, however, is decent; and I look forward to more. If you need help with corrections, feel free to email me.

Yay, actually liked this a lot!

I don't really thing that Ron was very OOC. He does have a habit of running off at the mouth and losing his temper. Why do you think he left Harry and Hermione during the horcrux hunt? I kind of like this way of Harry and Severus getting together, but then I am a Snarry fan. You go girl!!!