rate_review Reviews

Very interesting, would love to see where this is going.

I like this so far- your storyline and characterizations are interesting, but you REALLY need a beta-reader. Your grammar and punctuation are atrocious. Don't be discouraged, though - I do look forward to your next chapter. :0)

I have to say, for somebody whose first language is not english, your story is very readable. I think the plot could turn out to be rather delicious, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you might take this.

Poor Severus. I can just imagine what would be going through his mind each day as he has to teach Harry. I wouldn't mind seeing some interaction and sweet scheming from his friends. Hermione in particular is fun to play with. I'm sure she would be happy to do a little meddling in Harry's affairs. ;o)

One note though, you may find having a beta-reader helpful. I know some people have difficulty with them, but even just having somebody to fix any grammar mistakes you might miss would be a good thing.

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I think you did a good job and am looking forward to more. Thankyou