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by starstruck86

schedule October 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Sorry, came back from my mini-vacation (Portugal is beautiful, and it only grows more every year, I swear so), and had had to catch up on my reading.

I knew there were going to be problems. Severus was, somehow, almost too accepting of everything. It hits him hard, just who he is with. Although I believe that does not mean he regrets it (or *truly* regrets it), or wants to stop, the entire weight of Ron
schedule October 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yes, well, thank you for the image of Ron in a corset and fishnets. I'm not really sure what I'm going to do with that. It's just this sort of thing that makes me giggle at inappropriate times and causes those around me ask "What?"


Neurotic really isn't used by mental health professionals anymore but if one ever needed a point of reference as to the meaning of the word, look at Severus.

I half expect the dear man to be found one day, scrubbing the tiles of his kitchen with a toothbrush and muttering 'Dirt. Dirt everywhere.'

He's also the kind of person who when you say 'nice day, what?' he spends the next few hours wondering about what you really meant by that.
person talley
schedule October 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hard chapter but so good. I love a story that's psychological as well. Yes! Glad you add a few details and uhm images to that cheesecake foray. Weird what Ron is doing. I'm a bit perplexed. My heart stopped when Ron muttered out to Harry, yet you had Snape feeling a presence. So I feel much better about that. Hate whoever the client was who hurt Ron. Snape didn't recognize the name alas he could be using an alias, but still I was a bit worried as to who that client MIGHT have been. I like how you weave in the pets of the owners into your story. Looking forward to more on this. btw I absolutely adore a snarky Draco. Go team Fire and Ice. But do continue with the this lovely pairing.
schedule October 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Got through Chapters 2-4. Ron's certainly a mess, isn't he? Still, it's to be expected considering what he's been through. Great job with describing the awkward icky situation of Severus bumping into Weasley's everywhere knowing they were missing Ron.

What a situation to be in, eh? On the one hand, wanting to comfort them by telling them their son and brother was alive and close by, but at the same time not being able to lest Ron flees and hides himself even better.



Now, let's just see if Ron will pull his head out of his arse and let Severus help him.


CAPTCHAS are a real pain. I swear all I get are smudges.
person hairsprayX12
schedule October 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Damn, that Ron is extra stubborn!!! He's in love with Severus, he just won't admit it!!! And Severus is such a great big bundle of sweetness beneath the hard candy shell exterior!!! Love that man!!!

Wasn't expecting Harry as a ghost but...it works. Wonder if we get to see a little more of how Ron's family is doing soon?
person kai
schedule October 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG! that rescue attempt! awesome! i actually thought he was going to bust him out not have it go the way it did, with the mistress actually firing him and all that.

also that bit about harry maybe haunting ron, that was a great part. ron and severus convo near the end, was so sad and yet so hopeful. i loved it.

update soon!! ^_^
person Sheree
schedule October 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Such woe! Physically Ron's been saved, but its wrenching to know that he's mentally still in the same place.

Severus has a job ahead of him - that's for sure, but maybe Harry can help.

Waiting for the next chapter w/ a bit of fear. ;)
schedule October 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1.

Well, it's official. Thanks to you, I'm now totally a Snape/Ron junky. I was setting about reading your first story when this one caught my attention. Out of all the pairings, Snape/Ron is highly unusual but you work wonders with them.

Poor Ron working as a prostitute and the reasons why. Although Snape would make a good sugar daddy for him.


Bf walks into the room. "Whatcha reading?"

Me: *indecipherable mumbling*

Bf: What?

Me: Something. Uh...go someplace else for a few minutes.

Bf: *shrugs and goes someplace else*



Now, onto chapter 2.
person abbicee
schedule October 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It's nice to think that Harry is looking out for Ron. If only Harry could convince Ron that this self destructive lifestyle is not what he would want for him. Where's that resurrection stone when it's needed? At least Ron and Severus came to some kind of truce, however fragile it might be. I was worried that Ron would leave immediately and Severus wouldn't be able to find him. Still, nothing's settled and there's still time for things to get worse. (nibbles at a fingernail)
person abbicee
schedule October 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well I'm quite behind on things, we're moving into the twentyfirst century at work and now we have to re-tag every blessed item. On the other hand, at least we're no longer adding up the days totals with just pen, ink and calculater anymore. So, I have to admit I never thought your next story would feature Ron as a prostitute, but I'm intrigued with finding out how he got there and why. What happpened to make Ron take take such a self destructive step? Was it just losing his best friends or something else? I can see Severus and Ron growing closer and the potential for disaster is so great I keep waiting for a bomb to go off. It's only three chapters but the suspense has me barely blinking as I read. I can't wait to see what happens on Christmas.

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