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January 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I was trying to read it, really I was, but I got so distracted by the links being *in* the text that I couldn't do any more, and I really don't remember enough of the "Hermione's really a pureblood" story to give you any more of a review. A suggestion: since you've already put the links at the end of your story, take them out of the text. You've made too many paranthetical statements that aren't really statements - it detracts from whatever you were trying to convey.
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January 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Here's a test. Take it all the way to the end, even if it's just for fun. I think it could help you sort things out. http://www.springhole.net/quizzes/marysue.htm
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January 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
of course he isn't going to make it easy. he's severus snape. lol. really good chapter.
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January 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
For being your first fanfiction I like it very much. I can't wait to read more. As far as Beta's I have some free time and I'm not to shabby in fixing others mistakes. If you want my help you can e-mail me at brittanyfaith13@hotmail.com. Hope to read or hear from you soon.
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January 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Good concept but careful there, you're Mary-Sueing.
Get rid of the self-insertion and you'll have a good fic.
~M
Get rid of the self-insertion and you'll have a good fic.
~M
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January 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
ohhhh. I'm quite excited about this story. Can't wait to read how it will all develop.
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January 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Please update soon.
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January 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Like much better :D
I'm sorry I can't beta, but I'm traveling around the US for a while...
I'm sorry I can't beta, but I'm traveling around the US for a while...
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January 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
For me this goody goody Voldie is a little out of my taste, but hey I wonder who could be the bad guy, please not Harry or Ron, better Mc Gonagal or Dumbledore. Poor Draco a Crucio and in front of Hermione. Please we need more!
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January 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Interestingly enough, my review seems to have dissappeared. Was I too rude or harsh. I apologise. Thought that concrit was welcome. My bad.
~Mia
~Mia