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November 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
more more more!!! but stop bypassing the sex!
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October 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
why are you such a great writer and have to get me addicted to your stories?
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October 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
good start i found you and i like your work
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October 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i like that sirius is alive i do hope that luc care's about harry
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October 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i do hope that luc want harry for him
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September 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love the story is so interesting. I love Lucius little nickname for Harry its so cute and funny. I can't wait to read more.
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September 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5 please!!!
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July 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hello!
Okay, your story isn't all that bad and your writing isn't either (you seem to have a problem with tenses, however, and I would definitely correct your summary if I were you), but it's not very good for a story if you tell your reader's the entire content of the next chaprter BEFOREHAND. Honestly, it's pretty stupid (no offence meant). So I would just delete those "teasers" who are pretty much summaries themselves. Enhances the suspence. Also I would very much like it if you'd fleshen up your story with some proper descriptions.
As for ideas ... it's your story not mine^^
Fruehling
Okay, your story isn't all that bad and your writing isn't either (you seem to have a problem with tenses, however, and I would definitely correct your summary if I were you), but it's not very good for a story if you tell your reader's the entire content of the next chaprter BEFOREHAND. Honestly, it's pretty stupid (no offence meant). So I would just delete those "teasers" who are pretty much summaries themselves. Enhances the suspence. Also I would very much like it if you'd fleshen up your story with some proper descriptions.
As for ideas ... it's your story not mine^^
Fruehling
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July 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hello again!
Sorry, I seem to have mixed up the summaries of 'Meet Me Halfway' and 'Truly Madly Deeply' which I haven't read because the summary was so full of grammatical errors. Since you wrote that, too, the advice still stands. I can only talk about me, but summaries are the most important factor in my decision to read something .... or not.
Fruehling
Sorry, I seem to have mixed up the summaries of 'Meet Me Halfway' and 'Truly Madly Deeply' which I haven't read because the summary was so full of grammatical errors. Since you wrote that, too, the advice still stands. I can only talk about me, but summaries are the most important factor in my decision to read something .... or not.
Fruehling
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June 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Another interesting story! Yay! I will try my hardest to give you ideas! Just let me think about it.