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for Just Like Cinderella

by KristalR

schedule March 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am definitely curious. I wonder when "Prince Charming" will actually start to be charming. I did notice a few grammatical errors but I can't point all of them out in this review, so I'll just mention some of the ones I caught. Instead of Hermione saying "prepare," it should be "prepared." Instead of "best friend," Harry has two "best friends" in this story I believe. Also, instead of "shake my head," it should be "shaking my head." Other than the few grammatical errors, the story is great. I really do enjoy the sarcasm. Somehow I almost wish that Harry doesn't point out he is being sarcastic, since your writing definitely speaks for itself. Great job! Can't wait to read more.

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