rate_review Reviews

I know you wrote ths ages ago , i still wanted to tell you how gret it was. I really like the characters and the plot was excellent. The only flaw at all i saw was the pot. I thought it made Hermione and Sirius seem weak and immature. Adults dont need to get high everytime they are upset- tgats how high schoolers deal with their problem (at least in my experience). Really though thats a tiny flaw :-) 

Cool story With great character building. And you got me to actully like Sirus.

I thought that the plot of your story was very interesting, and I liked that you managed to incorporate muggle history into it. I also liked the little twist at the end. Hermione's plan on how to deal with the plume was well thought out. Hermione and Sirius were really cute together. Ginny's line at the end of the story was a great ending.

Some of the jokes in the story went over my head. I am not sure if I just didn't get them, or if the information leading up to them wasn't clear. I'd recommend getting someone else to read your story, if you have the option. Sometimes as an author, we already know what is happening in the story, so we don't realize that it isn't completely clear. I hope that is helpful.

I look forward to reading more of your work.

Other than the odd typo here and there, it was a very intriguing tale. Thank you for sharing and happy writing!

I don't know if I reviewed this before or not, but I absolutely loved it. And this is in spite of my not really caring for Sirius at all. I can't help it, I just love a good mystery. By the by, if you want a good example of a male masturbation scene,re your request earlier in the A/N's, I would recommend 'Beyond the Veil' by La Bibliographe. There is a most--interesting- incident of Lucius indulging himself that is most instructive.

I'm happy that you finished but sad to see it end. Does that make any sense? LOved the poetic justice that Blaise got. You have a gift for writing Sirius. Looking forward to the next story after the World cup I'm sure. I loved the U.S. vs England I just hope we last.

hello,

i caught the highlights of US v. UK and saw a bit of argentina but the sound was off. The kiddo likes Irish Hurling, Soccer (football) and basketball because there's a lot of constant action. Football and baseball are boring because there's a lot of standing around and constant commercials. WE're toying with the idea of fall soccer b/c it starts at 3 and she'll be old enough by the skin of her tiny teeth. It's either that or dancing, but i think the soccer would wear her out more and make a happy mommy out of me by 8pm. I am happy south africa got to host the series, because it's a great honor and treat, but you couldn't pay me to visit a place without potable water and easily accessable flushing toilets, and I don't say this lightly. Half my family is from Thailand and another branch (smaller but still significant in numbers) is from Peru and there's not a lot of plumbing to be found, muchless potable water in either places. I think everyone should be blessed with massive amounts of clean drinking water and flushing toilets. There are many lovely organizations and charities that seek to provide potable water and water filters to poor people all over the world, and i'm happy to donate money to them.

oh and i'm glad sirius finally got his rock off without busting a nut. (I love fanfiction, i can cuss ans talk trashy without worry of it being repeated in a stage whisper in public).

Thanks for the update and have fun watching men run around after a ball. You know, I will say this, do those men really need all those those clothes on? They played sports naked in ancient greece, and i surely wouldn't mid watching those men play naked.

Just a thought. Perhaps a petition is in order?

Jillian

hello,

you must REALLY want to watch the world cup if you posted in such a rush! Well, not that I mind, as I got to read more....

some of the stations near me are playing the games again at a more reasonable hour, because let's face it, i'm not getting up in the middle of the night to watch it.

i look forward to reading your next story,

jillian

p.s. i really like the last chapter, how hemrione got her say.

So many chapters at once, you spoil us! Great plot and well written, it held my attention the whole way through. Ahh if only Sirius made a come back in the books...and that's why we have you writing the proper endings :) Look forward to your next story!

OK OK....I'm reviewing.....I loved it. I don't like how fast you made the ending come about, but I liked the story as a whole. I could tell you were rushing to finish this just to watch the World Cup. Honestly, woman, a game? Please!!! Anyway, on to my review. I like how you were able to tell Lucius that he couldn't get the Plume and why, even though you/Hermione lied about where it was in the frame. I really wish you hadn't made Blaise part of the whole scheme. I love Blaise. He's one of those "invisible" characters that just needs lovins.

I love the fact that it took two weeks before Harry and Ginny dragged the Stupid Trio to see Hermione, and the fact that she and Sirius had already cemented their relationship without telling anyone. That was fantastic.

Anyway, I have the feeling that we will not be seeing anything new until the Cup is over, so I'll just say this. Write something again soon, something different, something new, something not done yet. I challenge you to write something no one else has thought of. I love reading all these stories, and I have read hundreds of them. I am looking for something new to catch my eye, and I think you can do that.......I am relying on your imagination to do this.........