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September 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Neville's first time was very sweet and well written. I enjoyed reading it (although I was really hoping to read Hermione's first time). Please please please don't make us wait a whole week to read Hermione's experience. *looks hopefully at author*
I noticed a few minor errors: "Loosing" should be "Losing" in the title, "prostate" is mistyped as "prostrate" once, "breath" and "breathe" were mixed up in a few places. Much better than I would be able to manage if I were writing in a foreign language! :-)
I noticed a few minor errors: "Loosing" should be "Losing" in the title, "prostate" is mistyped as "prostrate" once, "breath" and "breathe" were mixed up in a few places. Much better than I would be able to manage if I were writing in a foreign language! :-)
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September 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I must admit, that I am glad that you had Neville lose his virginity first. It was sweet and erotic at the same time.
I do not normally read slash, but this story line is just too good. Even the slash parts. I think that it is because you have the whole Dominant/submissive relationship to make it so DAMN EROTIC!!
Thank you, and I look forward the the next chapter with Hermoine. Please post it soon!?!?!?!?!
I do not normally read slash, but this story line is just too good. Even the slash parts. I think that it is because you have the whole Dominant/submissive relationship to make it so DAMN EROTIC!!
Thank you, and I look forward the the next chapter with Hermoine. Please post it soon!?!?!?!?!
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September 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i dont see why you were so worried about this chapter. it was done beautifully. please update soon!!! i want to see what happens next with hermoine and ferir.
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September 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
More please??? :)
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September 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
okay i am FINALLY able to write a reveiw sorry it is so very so in coming! i loved, loved, loved, Loved the chapter! :) i love the power she has and the way in which she uses it! :) i loved how she used it and the instict she has with it. i am also going to go crazy waiting to see (well read really) there-ferir and hermione's- interaction! i am so, so, so hoping that is the next chapter and i so waiting for more! update soon!!!! :)
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September 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
With the weapons of a woman... She fights hard.
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September 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Best story ever!! I am really loving this, hope you add more soon! Also, to be not a native speaker of English your story is even more amazing!
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September 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I loved this chaper. You really did a good job of showing that the wolves have a softer side, but arent willing to be pushovers. hope you update soon, because i cant wait to see where this heads.
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September 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i demand you continue this brilliant fic, havnt seen one this good in a long time. please update soon.
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September 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh That was agood chapter. I love how you put who will be involved in the chapter at the top!