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September 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh my... Lord!! You must be the most gifted fan fiction writer that I know of. This story is so well thought up! It has an unbelivably interesting plot and super steamy sexy scenes! I love the scenes perhaps even more when they focus on Voldemort's pleasure, btw... and Hermione did have her share of satisfaction, just from pleasuring her Dom and being in control for a while...
Also, plot-wise, I can't wait to find out who Voldemort's outside contact is! You said "man", so I guess it's not Katie, though I am a bit paranoid about her, don't know why... perhaps because she set Hermione up with Voldemort in the first place and seems to know about Hermione's assassination attempt on him and always seems to have something to hide and... oh well, I'll just wait and see :D There are many bits and pieces that I feel are going to play a role in the plot... Like the shields... And didn't Tom take Hermione's ballpoint at their first meeting? Perhaps he wanted to keep it as a trophy, or just for the kicks, or he had another reason... Look what you're doing to your readers, woman! :P
I wish you good luck with the next chapter and thank you for so much fun!
Also, plot-wise, I can't wait to find out who Voldemort's outside contact is! You said "man", so I guess it's not Katie, though I am a bit paranoid about her, don't know why... perhaps because she set Hermione up with Voldemort in the first place and seems to know about Hermione's assassination attempt on him and always seems to have something to hide and... oh well, I'll just wait and see :D There are many bits and pieces that I feel are going to play a role in the plot... Like the shields... And didn't Tom take Hermione's ballpoint at their first meeting? Perhaps he wanted to keep it as a trophy, or just for the kicks, or he had another reason... Look what you're doing to your readers, woman! :P
I wish you good luck with the next chapter and thank you for so much fun!
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September 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was absolutely fantastic! And shes getting a grip on their combined magic, finally going to end it with Ron. . . Oh happy days. ;)
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September 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I reviewed Puppet earlier (2nd time reading it) and said Id review this when you next updated! Hermione is almost as bad as Voldy for wanting to be in control! Cant wait for the next update! Absolute savage story! You and Serpent In Red are legends! =]
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September 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I just love the way I have no alerts on this site and come here when remember - and get some three new amazing chapters to read;D So yeah, I love you for that;P This actually is the most sexually satisfying piece of fanfiction I'm currently reading, not to mention the plot and of course, our Dark Lord leaves me speechless once again;D Love Him! Hmm, love is a stupid emotion, but what can I, a weak human, do about it? You are my hero, lady:P And I wish you a most productive evening >:D
Elis
Elis
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September 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Poor Ron. Oh well! I love how you make up all these theories, it's very interesting. Love the chapter!
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September 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ooookay, doing this again, then. Baaaaah. Hate reviews like that. At least on FF you get a new window so you can't go back a page by accident. Oh, well... here it goes again.
I was a bit surprised that Tom just ignored Hermione being upset. Although, then maybe he just didn't want her start to crying, because he would no doubt find that annoying as hell.
"'You're so keen on all the boundaries set by the mediocrity that you don't see that magic is in essence limitless,' he said, shifting his upper body towards her as he talked animatedly about his favourite subject, 'so fond of the laws of magic that you don't even see that they don't exist. They're a construct of the mind, a false fence created by frightened fools. However, those forcing themselves to stay behind it when they can achieve so much more are the worst kind of fools.'" - Have you been reading post-modernism theories by any change? I got a vibe about it from this sentence. You have an interesting theory on what magic is, here. However, as we have established before, I don't share your view about what magic is. But I guess that is the beauty of fiction, you get to write what you like. (damn you, free speech and all that crap. When I become a dictator in my own country, everyone will have to think like me, OR DIE... what do you mean I have spent too much time writing from Voldemort's Point of View?)
"'Really? You wouldn't want to teach me love, change my evil, wicked ways and turn me into a good boy?'" - You can be a good boy, Tommy! All you need is some lurve and hugs and cookies and then you'll be shitting rainbows and have sparkly skin, I promise!!!!!!
"Hermione scowled. 'And hold my breath while I am at it?'" "'I am definitely dropping you on the head. Better result, much faster.' She nodded, smiling brightly at the visual in her mind." - loved this XD
"'I killed someone this morning.'
He nearly choked. The water flew straight back in the glass as well as travelled up his nose. Tom coughed violently, quickly placing the glass to the side. Hermione patted his back, but there was a mocking edge to her assistance. When he'd finally stopped coughing, she held out her glass to him. Tom drank up the rest of her water and then turned to her immediately." - I just loved this as well! Finally someone managing to shock the Dark Lord! He soooooo needed that! Mahahahahhahaha!
About the sex-scene, then. I liked the first part of it, Voldemort being all controlling and stuff. And I think the whole thing is very in character for him, and fits the plot. But this wasn't really my cup of tea. For some reason, I have never found it even a little bit interesting to read about a man getting a blow job. If it's a part of a much bigger scene, then sure. But I just feel like it's so... boring. But as I said, that's just my humble opinion. (once again, when I become a dictator... ;))
I can understand that Hermione doesn't want to give up her last bit of control. But I hope she does soon. Miya wants more smut :D She also wants to find out what Voldemort is planning and who he got on the outside. Although, I guess he got several people on the outside... hehehe.
A beautifully poetic description about Hermione finding out her own magical essence. And funny when she suddenly finds herself thirteen feet up the air, tihi. She will have quite a bit of bruises in the morning, I'm sure.
YAAAAAAAAAAY! Hermione is finally breaking up with Ron!!!!!! Want to read that NOW! NOOOOOOW! (if I were a dictator already, you would be sending it to me... NOW!) Oooh, well. Thank you for a very nice update and chapter and I wish you the best of luck with the next chapter. So. Now this review is over and you can go back to write it. Shooo!
I was a bit surprised that Tom just ignored Hermione being upset. Although, then maybe he just didn't want her start to crying, because he would no doubt find that annoying as hell.
"'You're so keen on all the boundaries set by the mediocrity that you don't see that magic is in essence limitless,' he said, shifting his upper body towards her as he talked animatedly about his favourite subject, 'so fond of the laws of magic that you don't even see that they don't exist. They're a construct of the mind, a false fence created by frightened fools. However, those forcing themselves to stay behind it when they can achieve so much more are the worst kind of fools.'" - Have you been reading post-modernism theories by any change? I got a vibe about it from this sentence. You have an interesting theory on what magic is, here. However, as we have established before, I don't share your view about what magic is. But I guess that is the beauty of fiction, you get to write what you like. (damn you, free speech and all that crap. When I become a dictator in my own country, everyone will have to think like me, OR DIE... what do you mean I have spent too much time writing from Voldemort's Point of View?)
"'Really? You wouldn't want to teach me love, change my evil, wicked ways and turn me into a good boy?'" - You can be a good boy, Tommy! All you need is some lurve and hugs and cookies and then you'll be shitting rainbows and have sparkly skin, I promise!!!!!!
"Hermione scowled. 'And hold my breath while I am at it?'" "'I am definitely dropping you on the head. Better result, much faster.' She nodded, smiling brightly at the visual in her mind." - loved this XD
"'I killed someone this morning.'
He nearly choked. The water flew straight back in the glass as well as travelled up his nose. Tom coughed violently, quickly placing the glass to the side. Hermione patted his back, but there was a mocking edge to her assistance. When he'd finally stopped coughing, she held out her glass to him. Tom drank up the rest of her water and then turned to her immediately." - I just loved this as well! Finally someone managing to shock the Dark Lord! He soooooo needed that! Mahahahahhahaha!
About the sex-scene, then. I liked the first part of it, Voldemort being all controlling and stuff. And I think the whole thing is very in character for him, and fits the plot. But this wasn't really my cup of tea. For some reason, I have never found it even a little bit interesting to read about a man getting a blow job. If it's a part of a much bigger scene, then sure. But I just feel like it's so... boring. But as I said, that's just my humble opinion. (once again, when I become a dictator... ;))
I can understand that Hermione doesn't want to give up her last bit of control. But I hope she does soon. Miya wants more smut :D She also wants to find out what Voldemort is planning and who he got on the outside. Although, I guess he got several people on the outside... hehehe.
A beautifully poetic description about Hermione finding out her own magical essence. And funny when she suddenly finds herself thirteen feet up the air, tihi. She will have quite a bit of bruises in the morning, I'm sure.
YAAAAAAAAAAY! Hermione is finally breaking up with Ron!!!!!! Want to read that NOW! NOOOOOOW! (if I were a dictator already, you would be sending it to me... NOW!) Oooh, well. Thank you for a very nice update and chapter and I wish you the best of luck with the next chapter. So. Now this review is over and you can go back to write it. Shooo!
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September 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I have to start with the Paserltong part. That was amazingly complicated, and I admire you for making it all sound so realistic. I think that Pr.Eleftheriou (Gesundheit) doesn't sleep at night.
I shall make no comment about what I think of Ron, because I can go on and on.
Oh Neville! You made it on this story! By the way, your Grandma is awesome.
Hermione gets really good things out of Tom( in many, many ways). I wonder, if people figured out that she cured Crucio induced madness thanks to Lord Voldemort, how will they react?
"Her heart skipped a beat. She knew."...I'll just wait it out.
Wait, he died? Did he sleep himself to death? Or is it the collar again?
So good chapter, lot's of information and cliffhangers. Looking back, I realized that Hermione has already changed a lot since the beginning of the story. I think you can handle your character arcs really well.
I shall make no comment about what I think of Ron, because I can go on and on.
Oh Neville! You made it on this story! By the way, your Grandma is awesome.
Hermione gets really good things out of Tom( in many, many ways). I wonder, if people figured out that she cured Crucio induced madness thanks to Lord Voldemort, how will they react?
"Her heart skipped a beat. She knew."...I'll just wait it out.
Wait, he died? Did he sleep himself to death? Or is it the collar again?
So good chapter, lot's of information and cliffhangers. Looking back, I realized that Hermione has already changed a lot since the beginning of the story. I think you can handle your character arcs really well.
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September 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
that was awesome!!! he must be after a baby dark lord with her on all that fertility potions even if they were doctored up she wasn't on protection .... so tell me does she get preg?????
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September 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
OH! This was... wow...
I do like the friendly relationship between Neville and Hermione.
And that Parseltounge translation was simply so believable. :)
Wonderfully done once again.
Hugs and butterfly kisses
Your
A. Malfoy
(A.k.a. Chamilia Luthien Tinuviel in FF.Net)
I do like the friendly relationship between Neville and Hermione.
And that Parseltounge translation was simply so believable. :)
Wonderfully done once again.
Hugs and butterfly kisses
Your
A. Malfoy
(A.k.a. Chamilia Luthien Tinuviel in FF.Net)
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September 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow, I guess with all that power Hermione has got now, a simple somus can put a person to eternal sleep... Loved this chapter!