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August 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
you should deffintly do a sequel
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May 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I am Hooked....and anyone who is hooked on a good story...well needless to say I want more. This is brilliant and I can't wait for more and please keep it going please
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May 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow, he sure jumped into that feet first. So what happens if Sev gets scotched...not to mention dealing with Dumbles (that whole teacher/student taboo thing) and their Voldi problem. If he manages to winkle out that Harry is Sev's pet they'll all be up crap creak with out a paddle, no joke.
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May 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Sequel please!!! I thought this story was just adorable! I could definitely read a few more chapters about snape and his pet :)
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May 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Excelent work I love tha harry/Snape tales and yours is short but good. Maybe in the second part you can elavorate more. So yes please continue.
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May 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Snape is correct, there is always room for improvement, but that applies to every author, not just writers branching out into a new genre or trying on a style to see if they like it.
you have no idea how hard I lol'ed at harry waking up, and his big revelation. ^_^ Poor Harry.
For your first attempt at BDSM it definitely wasn't bad. The only real thing that kinda bothered me about it was we didn't know WHY Severus was giving in after only a brief glimpse of random images and surface thoughts. Was it for punishment, to humiliate Harry, or revenge against James? Does he actually care about Harry or was the whole thing because he was bored and he could get away with it with a student who wasn't going to say 'no'? You easily portrayed how and why Harry would like to submit, but you didn't even touch on why Severus would respond to that submission, and that's kind of important for a Top.
Also, to a sub, getting to suck off their master and cum is a treat, not a punishment, because they get to be close and give their master pleasure in order to seek their approval. If Snape truly was punishing Harry, he definitely wouldn't have been allowed to cum, and would probably have been truly punished first with spanking/ humiliation (and/or) forced to suck Snape off who would have then left him there once he'd finished without letting Harry cum and telling him how disappointed and upset he was at Harry's behavior.
To someone who actively seeks out another persons' approval, having them be disappointed or upset with you is far more painful and distressing than physical punishment could ever be to the person. In fact they normally actively seek out the physical punishment afterward in order to redeem themselves.
I'm not any sort of expert on BDSM, but it is one of my favorite topics of discussion. I'd be happy to help if you think I might be able to help actively portray whatever you are wanting to do with the story. And if you would like a fantastic resource for anything your deviant little mind can dream up (And a WHOLE lot I guarantee it never will or even thought possible) try fetlife. com, it's like facebook for fetishists, and trust me there is a group for EVERYTHING.
Hope this was at least helpful to you,
you have no idea how hard I lol'ed at harry waking up, and his big revelation. ^_^ Poor Harry.
For your first attempt at BDSM it definitely wasn't bad. The only real thing that kinda bothered me about it was we didn't know WHY Severus was giving in after only a brief glimpse of random images and surface thoughts. Was it for punishment, to humiliate Harry, or revenge against James? Does he actually care about Harry or was the whole thing because he was bored and he could get away with it with a student who wasn't going to say 'no'? You easily portrayed how and why Harry would like to submit, but you didn't even touch on why Severus would respond to that submission, and that's kind of important for a Top.
Also, to a sub, getting to suck off their master and cum is a treat, not a punishment, because they get to be close and give their master pleasure in order to seek their approval. If Snape truly was punishing Harry, he definitely wouldn't have been allowed to cum, and would probably have been truly punished first with spanking/ humiliation (and/or) forced to suck Snape off who would have then left him there once he'd finished without letting Harry cum and telling him how disappointed and upset he was at Harry's behavior.
To someone who actively seeks out another persons' approval, having them be disappointed or upset with you is far more painful and distressing than physical punishment could ever be to the person. In fact they normally actively seek out the physical punishment afterward in order to redeem themselves.
I'm not any sort of expert on BDSM, but it is one of my favorite topics of discussion. I'd be happy to help if you think I might be able to help actively portray whatever you are wanting to do with the story. And if you would like a fantastic resource for anything your deviant little mind can dream up (And a WHOLE lot I guarantee it never will or even thought possible) try fetlife. com, it's like facebook for fetishists, and trust me there is a group for EVERYTHING.
Hope this was at least helpful to you,