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March 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
While I understand this is OOC, most of the story had me scratching my head because of the characterizations. Sometimes they were very in character before dancing outside the realm into OOC-ness to where they were polar opposites. Along with that, I would suggest finding a beta. There were problems i noticed with some word ussage and the commas'. Beyond that, it was a decent job!