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Outstanding! I'm sorry I havn't been reviewing lately but I haven't had time to read really long chapters, so I had to save it for the weekend. I can't wait to see what happens next!

I am absolutely loving this story, it has so many unique features i have not previously encountered. your writing and plot development are wonderful, despite a few grammatical issues here and there. i cannot wait to see where you take us readers next, nor how this will all end. but i look forward to your updates.

now for some constructive criticsm. as i noted previously, there are some grammatical errors, lack of commas and the like. also, it seems some of your sentences are missing a word. both of these happen rarely, maybe once or twice a chapter. they are far from off-putting, but i want you to be aware. also, in this chapter, somewhere in the middle-ish (honeydukes?) there is a sentence with the word "dracken" used. there was at least one other usage in a previous chapter, but i don't remember where; indeed, i did not mark it out until reading your note on the change to "chuvash". also, on quite a few of your chapters the entire chapter is listed twice, and once three times. this is a little distracting for a reader, so i hope you can either change it, or at least avoid a repeat in the future.

all in all, this fic is unique and exploring new ideas and directions for me. i cannot wait to see the scenes when the marks are removed, nor the reactions to the outting of ron and ginny as dumbledores. it will be *very* interesting to see padfoot's reaction to the truth and Sirius I's reaction to padfoot. i also cannot wait to see what you reveal about the backstory of what happened between gellert and albus.

you are doing a fabulous job, and i look forward immensely to your next update.

cheers,
~lilyrose

Please continue the story. I really like it. I have read all 33 parts in just 2 days.

quite an interesting story, although sometimes i noticed you accidentally posted the same chapter twice in a chapter. Still i am intrigued and want to see some of Sirius III.

I can't wait for more....this is a brilliant story and I look forward to reading the next chapter when Severus and Lucius find out about what happen to Draco....going to be good.

I love your story. Please keep on going! I cannot wait to see what happens next.

Chapter 12A is a bit messed up though? The lemon scene is deleted with the words 'Lemony stuff found on AFF' or something like that? Just thought you may wish to fix that ^_^

I'm sorry I haven't reviewed your stories uptil now. I've been making up my mind whether to continue or not and I must say. I am loving every chapter of this story. It's intriguing, light-hearted and a much join to experience. I'm loving the multiple chapter updates and I will be looking forward to what you post next. Until next time.

exceeding expectations loving it keep up yhe grt job ;)

Missed your story while you were editing...I am so glad that you put these new chapters on, the politics of this story is so interesting that I look forward to reading this story with great anticipation. Thank you for the new chapters!

I have really enjoyed the story. I see there are still chapters referring to Dracken. One thing I am bewildered about is that some chapters have 2 or more copies of that chapter in them. I'm guessing that is not on purpose. I don't know when the last chapter was posted, but I hope you will still continue this story. It shouldn't take too long to change everything to Chuvash and resume. At least I hope so. Thanks for sharing. Good story line.