rate_review Reviews

First, off, it's a somewhat good story. You've done some errors on the way, though, when you left the 'cliff hanger' it wasn't what you aimed at, you see, anyone could tell that Severus wouldn't leave Harry where he was, thus it wasn't unpredictable or exiting as a cliff hanger should be. The place where you could have left it, was right after Vernon entered the spare bed room, even then it wouldn't be much of a cliff hanger, as anyone who read the first chapter would know what would happen to Harry. In other words, you revealed too much too soon to make a particular good cliff hanger. The only place you could have almost have placed it, was before you hinted that Severus was arriving. Then to make it more intense, it'd better if he was just a second from death or after death. In other words Harry would have died, of course, that would have ruined the plot, but the necessaries of staying dead wasn't there. SO he could have been dead for a very short time before being reviewed. Knowing of Severus promise to Dumbledore it would add the drama for almost dying himself.

nice start so far, keep up the good work, i look forward to seeing where you go with this :)

OK, I need more...that is intense with Poor Harry getting saved barely and well I just love
Sev...thank you for a good chapter.

That's was stupid of dumbles. after all, if you give someone a crappy childhood like that, it's just upping the chance for them to go rogue, especially when they could have had a better one with your intervention.

Something tells me Dumbledore will find a way out of this mess for himself. Poor Harry. At least he's safe for the moment.

Wow, poor Harry...and I think that you are doing just fine for a first fic. I will defineately be coming back to read more. :) All I have to say is poor Harry.

I just got finished with the second chapter and well, I can't wait for Harry to be found by Snape that is for sure...it will be interesting. Only one glaring mistake the word is nevertheless, it is one word. :) Thank you for chapter two look forward to chapter three.

Snape's frustrations...arg how about mine! Going good so far, and I want to see where you take it. I've read a few of these abused Harry/savior Sev fics and each one differs a little from the others; you've got a new twist on it that you're throwing Lucius in the mix, and I'd like to see how he gets involved and such. Keep going, and send me an e-mail if you can when you update. I sometimes forget either to check a story, or the story name. leania 07 @ gmail .com (w/out spaces of course.)

Leania

Poor Harry! Petunia just lets this happen to her blood family? You can't tell me she doesn't know. She has to. Someone kill them now! Severus has to help him!