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Excellent update!

Yet another confusing, twisting and just great chapter. The information given makes me want to read, but it is what you are holding out on that makes me want to read it even more. Can't wait to see the next chapter. Glad I could catch this one in between school work!

ch 17: Should have known Kreatcher is hiding stuff. Albus is going to make things difficult I think.

Ch. 13 -- Auh, that was so good of Narcissa, not to mention smart, to have all the service ware changed out for new!

Oh no! Not another bloody prophecy!

Another prophecy? Goodness. Things just keep getting more and more complicated don't they! Good chapter though hun. Can't wait to read more.

Was reading this story and got to chapter four before realizing an annoying pattern in the way you write, and it basically boils down to "show, don't tell." You basically would describe everything that was going on from each person's point of view, and thoughts, then had dialogue of them telling each other what they were thinking. I noticed I seemed to read the same thing several times. I think in chapter 3, Remus thought to himself that he agreed with sirius, then a paragraph later he said "I agree with sirius"

I do like the plot so far, it's an interesting concept, but the problem I've been having, coupled with a lot of OOCness, it's just a little difficult to read.

They are being too trusting.

Interesting chapter. I am curious as to whether or not the locket is the same one from the original books or what. Can't wait to read more.

I am loving this story. Can't wait to read more.