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Ah ah!! I want more.... Please.... ;-)

Love every F.ucking minute of it!!! ;-P
Thank you ;-)

YES!!! I'm so glad he finally pulled his head of his ass and took care of his wife. Loved the smut, but.......when did he get undressed?

So now they are realllly together! It will sure surprise Ron that she & Severus are working out so well - smiling even.

I am loving your wonderful story. I love Harry/Severus & couldn't imagine this Severus/Hermione pairing but it is really a natural one considering she has always been mature & very intelligent. I can't wait to read about the baby & how they manage! I like the way they are shyly getting closer to falling fully in love. With his view of love in marriage, she has her work cut out for her.

NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!! You can't leave it there!!! He needs to lend her a hand, help her out, at the very least show her how to use one of those novelty items. He owes her that much at least.

Love!! Can't wait for more!!

I have to admit that surprisingly the television shows you watched are quite accurate. When I was in high school, English was required in every year. We use names for our four years of high school, which consist of freshman (9), sophomore (10), junior (11) and senior (12). We start school at age five and only go for half days. We call it Kindergarten, which ironically translates from German as Children Garden. The North Idaho curriculum for English usually required the reading of at least one Shakespeare play. In Freshman year it was Romeo and Juliet, Sophomore year it was Julius Cesar but other classes were reading A Midsummer's Night Dream, Junior Year there wasn't one because we concentrated on American Literature, and Senior year it was MacBeth. We did go over English Grammar, but I admit that I learned more in my foreign language classes about English grammar than I did in English. When you learn another language like Spanish or German, you start to see the parts of words differently. I didn't understand that we do have different versions of our verbs until my third year of Spanish. Also the verb to be always seems to be irregular no mater the language. For instance in English it is, I am, you are, he, she, it is, we are, and they are. Where as to walk follows the usual diagram of I walk, you walk, he, she, it walks, we walk, and they walk.

A definition of a run on sentence is the lacking of proper punctuation to break up an overly long sentence. Sometimes these may be fixed with proper comma placement. Other times a semicolon is required, but usually only when the two sentences could stand on their own. The example I gave of your semicolon in my last review is properly using that. The only times commas are required before a conjunction word like and, but, or, is when they are putting together to independent clauses (sentences that could stand on their own). A comma splice is also considered to be a run on sentence, but his occurs when someone puts a comma to link two independent clauses instead of a semicolon. The run on sentences I notice when commas aren't needed occur when you use too many conjunction words. Sometimes these overly long sentences can be broken into two free standing ones. I'll admit we did practice some of these things in high school English, but I don't remember what grade it was. Also, these may not be all the rules but they are the only ones of which I can think.

Okay now comes the fun part of my review. I'm so loving the sexual tension between the two. They're made for each other in nerd heaven, but then again it takes one to know one, right? I see that you brushed upon some of Snape's reasoning as to drugging Hermione on their wedding night. I love how she showed her Slytherin streak by standing on the bottom stair. Also, I can't wait to see her poke at that growing affection Severus already has. Sure he says he'll never lover her; however, we all know he's living in a world of denial. I may not be speaking of the river in Egypt, but he's drowning nonetheless. I look forward to your next update. Also, if my English lessons in your reviews get too tiring, please do not hesitate to tell me. I'll back off.

I suggest not letting the people who are picking at you about the fact that you don't have a college degree in Creative Writing bother you. Take it from someone who is working for said degree, you're doing fine. I've clicked on stories, started reading them, and had to stop because they were so horribly written. This story is interesting and I've noticed a distinct lack of common errors. Keep writing and don't let grammar nazis bother you. By the way, I'm really liking this story.

Keep writing!!!