Are you going to continue? I'm going to save the page and check occasionally to see if you update i hope you do
Hi silmelinda, I couldn't help but notice you seem to have taken down your LotR stories. I hope everything is ok. I really enjoyed your stories, so I'll miss them! eternalorigin@gmail.com
You aren't leaving this lovely story I hope. Love the pairing and especially can't wait for you to get to the part of Severus being pregnant. What fun that will be!! I'll be waiting anxiously.
This hasn't been updated in quite a while :( Has this by chance been dropped?
I really hope not!
"The young wizard almost grinned at getting a doze of an equal treatment, when a bulky oath gave him a hefty shove. . . ."
Did you mean "oaf"? An oath is either a vow or a cuss word. Harry could have muttered an oath when the oaf pushed him.
"The pair of girls, one beseeched by the bright purple hair. . . ."
Uh, not sure what you mean here, but I'm pretty sure it isn't "beseeched," which means implored or begged.
"The door to the Potion Master's shop was presentably neat and laconic. . . ."
Unless the door can talk, it can't be laconic, which means to say something using few words.
"Well aware of the ill-wishers who had no clams about destroying all he valued. . . ."
I believe you meant "qualms," not clams.
I'm sorry, but I don't think I'll continue reading this. There are just too many mistakes, which are driving me crazy. It's too bad, because it seems like an interesting story. I strongly suggest you look for a beta reader.