Oh, this chapter was fun! I found myself smiling through the whole thing. I'd love to be a beta, however I know my grammar skills are such that someone else would have to correct my corrections, lol. I can't wait for chapter three!
First of all, congratulations on posting your first story! I can't imagine how nerve wracking posting this must have been.
Secondly, I love this story! It was sexy in a soft way. You weren't vulgar or obscene (although those kinds of stories are wonderful as well, lol) and yet you still made me want more. I hope you decide to write more for this story. Smut scenes are wonderful, but I always enjoy when there's plot with it.
Lastly, in the name of constructive criticism, there were a few mistakes. However, they did not distract me from reading right on through. My best guess is you just need a beta reader to catch those pesky hiccups, and then your story shall be perfect. I hope to read more of your work soon!
Really good and I would definitely read more if your muse led that way!
Wow, this was a really good one-shot; I would totally be down for reading some more of this.