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August 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Mindy,
This is a really good First Fic. and i wonder where you got your ideas from. hmmmmmmmmm, You,Aly, And I Have all really Done the same kind of Fics. All D/g, but after my first one is done I amswutching to Hermione and Draco! these reviews aresupposed to be for what you lack so i think ya need is some spelling changes and some character research. other then that perfect! Keep going! :)
This is a really good First Fic. and i wonder where you got your ideas from. hmmmmmmmmm, You,Aly, And I Have all really Done the same kind of Fics. All D/g, but after my first one is done I amswutching to Hermione and Draco! these reviews aresupposed to be for what you lack so i think ya need is some spelling changes and some character research. other then that perfect! Keep going! :)
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August 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
A few notes on your story....for a first fic, this isn\'t bad. But you may want to have it checked over, there were a few minor errors in both spelling and grammer. Also, a bit more development might make it flow smoother. The abruptness of it is a bit jarring. Tell the story, not just what happens. :-) Keep up with it, it has potential.