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Lily\'s Worst Mistake	By : EllieK Category: Harry Potter > Threesomes/Moresomes Views: 5409 -:- Recommendations : 0 -:- Currently Reading : 0
Disclaimer: I do not own Harry Potter, nor any of the characters from the books or movies. I do not make any money from the writing of this story.

Chapter List
- 1-Lily's Worst Mistake
- 2-Reviews and responses
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Review 1: Fabulously filthy, very very funny, and so well put together! James Who? More!

Author's Response: More? You want more, do you? Be careful what you wish for! I have tons of Severus smut poems! Thank you so much for your kind words and taking the time to review!

Author's Response: A minute or two
Would never do
Snape is long in the trousers
An hour or more
Just to be sure
He�ll have me shouting out �Yowzers!�
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Review 2: Slytherin Master please! no furry animals, I stay with the snake. Great piece, congratulations, the way you got Lily is so off any other I've seen that is refreshing. You are a naughty girl indeed.

Author's Response: Naughty...I know ;) It wasn't a very hard decision for me to make. I say Snape all the way!!!

Snape has a wee wand he keeps in his pants
This one he uses to charm and entrance
Many a lady in Fanfiction farce
Seeks to grab hold of the dark wizard�s arse
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Review 3: Hilarious, as always! Now that your juices are flowing, get back to The Password Is, okay? What more could any woman want out of life? Snape and chocolate works for me. Love the Black lines!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Password is coming along a bit, but slowly.

Strip Snape completely, but leave on the mask
Death Eater shagging�s a thrill and a task
Nothing you�ve had until now can compare
To Severus Snape and his nude derri�re
Around in the front is a special contraption
Give it a yank just to see what will happen!
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Review 4: Damn it all! I just finished reading Vocalion's piece and had to change my panties from laughing so hard... now I get to do it all again! And obviously, I'd choose the Slytherin snake over the stag no matter how Freudian it sounds. But, on Potter's one good note, isn't a stag always horny? ;-D ~Lisa

Author's Response: Horny, yes...as good as a snake that can bend and twist and...ooooohhh...I may have to change my panties for a different reason. LOL!!!

My knickers are no longer dry as a bone
Severus, help me, right now I'm alone
Serpentine man with a talent for pleasure
Finish me off with your large manly treasure
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Review 5: What can I say? There's no way to respond to this but the way Lily did...

Author's Response: I know you prefer the ex-con, but thank you for reading my little fun fest!

Though Sirius Black is much more your style
I think you should try on my Snape for a while
I know Mr. Black is a jolly great pooch
But Severus Snape would be more fun to smooch
I'll share, but I warn you I get the first go
You bring the fudge and then on with the show!
Chocolate fixes a great many woes
Especially with Sevvie to suck on your toes!
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Review 6: OMG! Ellie, you are a delightful wench! I haven't had this good a chuckle in ages! And I heartily agree with you, I'd pick a Slytherin master any day of the week! :)

Author's Response: Shameless plugging pays off now and again, I see. I knew you'd get a kick out this one, Pook!

Chocolate nipples and shaft made of icing
I'll lick him for hours, I need no enticing
I need a shag soon or I shall go nuts
It's Severus Snape, no ifs ands or buts
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Review 7: I absolutely cannot write in rhythm or rhyme, but thorougly enjoy it when I read someone who can. And, boy, you can. I particularly enjoyed the litany of Mauraders... Peter's a bit squicky, but hell, Lily has them all in hand quite nicely.

Author's Response: Peter is very squicky! Thank you so much for the kind words! It's madness, really, but I do so enjoy my little poems.

Dark, wicked man from the land of wizards
I would crawl naked through a lifetime of blizzards
To have a go in the sack with dear Sevvie
It needn�t be loving, just real hot and heavy
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Review 8: OMG, that was *hysterical*!! 'If I had a cherry, I'd sit down on top...'! LOL!!! Guess who I'd have chosen...hmmm, I wonder...

Author's Response: I forgot your little poem! How careless of me�Thank you for reading!

I�m Snape the Professor; you�re teacher�s pet
Mind my instructions and you�ll not regret
Once I've made your cauldron smolder
I'll pitch the your legs right over my shoulder
Add a dash of treacle, so it's nice and sweet
My broomstick is ready to enjoy the heat
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Review 9: Still chuckling...

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I thought it was rather funny also!

Christmas is the time to in which to spread cheer
If only my Snapey could gather me near
I�d sit on his lap and he�d pull from his pocket
A firm gift of heat, his jolly great rocket!
Happy Christmas to me, I swear I�m not fickle
It�s time for a session of slap and tickle!
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Review 10: ::Wipes tears of mirth from eyes:: I swear the little one you put in response to my review made me laugh as much as the original poem!

Author's Response: I am very glad that I could be of service. Sorry about the format. All those miserable html tags are bugging my eyes out! I can write ridiculous Snape ryhmes all day, but I cannot seem to figure out a bloody thing to write on my actual stories right now! Er...I don't suppose you could lend me a muse that hasn't been smoking crack all day, could you?

Many thanks, EllieK
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Review 11: Slytherin Master for me!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for popping in to have a read! I am such a review whore!

Snape is your choice for a hot, steamy lay
I saw him first, so don�t get in my way!
I�ll rip off his pants and then drop to my knees
Merlin have mercy, I need Severus Please!
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Review 12: Such Smutty Talent. Much better poetry then I ever found in my school books ;-)

Author's Response: Would you believe that I hated English when I was in school? I never tried poetry until about 4 weeks ago. Snape is such a wonderful topic! Thanks so much for reviewing!

Granger is brainy, but I am of age
I�ll shag the Master as she pouts in rage
Detention is over, Hermione must go
I need no help to give Snapey a blow!
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Review 13: Wonderful! Very funny. Is there really a choice, a Slytherin Master or a Gryffindor Stag? I would definitely go with the one-eyed python. You need a link to the review page, too. The poems here are not be missed.

Author's Response: Thanks, Pearle! There is no debate about who I would choose! Thanks for reading!

This poem is by Vocalion:
Lavinia, Lavinia, Kiki Feeny
Had it bad for the Great Snapini
He filled her heart with flutters and leaps,
But he didn't know where to thrust his Neeps
So through the back door he did go
With a hey nonny nonny and a ho ho ho.
Once he was there, he filled her fully,
And shoved clean through to her woolly bully!
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Review 14: Brilliant !! And I'd pick the Slyterin Master over that prat Potter any day !!! Stupid cow Lily..!

Author's Response: Thanks! What the hell was she thinking? LOL! Thanks for stopping by and dropping a review!

Snape saw a wench whom he did fancy
He walked on over all proud and prancy
He showed her his wand growing in his robe
He asked her, begged her to let him probe
Into her fair nethers he then did wedge
His Snapely contraption of meat and two veg
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Review 15: Oh my god! That was priceless! Thanks for such a great break from studying! More! ~Aeryn

Author's Response: Thanks, Aeryn! I have been terribly busy with final exams! I am working my way through your series of works and loving them!

I am Snape, a true Right Bastard
The art of sex, I well have mastered
I placed on a wench a little hex
I wanted some of ferocious sex
She rode me well; I'd have to say
In a true, conniving Slytherin way
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Review 16: Oh this is just brilliant! It has instantly become one of my favorites. I always thought Lily was likely a bit of whore with all those "Marauders four" to choose from. Pity the fool for the wrong choice of shag, anyday it's the snake over the stag!

Author's Response: "...Lily was likely a bit of a whore..." LOL! We may never know. Thanks for the rave review!

Poor Mrs. Potter, she chose the wrong prat
I wonder what Harry would think about that?
I think Miss Lily�s was terribly daft
To pass over Severus with his long, mighty shaft
I�ll take what is left of her sweet, sloppy seconds
I�ll follow that basilisk wherever it beckons!
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I hope this was fun!

EllieK

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