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Reviews for Lucky Strike

By : SpeedyTomato
  • From Dharma on August 02, 2014
    I like your story. However, I would like to offer some advice on the writing style. If you stop using the same phrases over and over, such as "press on" "we'll work with that" and so forth, it will make the stories read better. The repetitiveness that shows up in overuse of words or phrases takes away from your story. Also, your characters repeat each other. Instead of repeating what the first character says maybe just say, that's a good idea. something other than the redundancy of repeating the words.

    I really like your storylines, just wanted to offer a small tidbit of info to help.
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  • From ANON - autumngold on July 15, 2014
    Is it wrong of me to hope that Harry sues James, Lily and Dumbledore? It makes me so mad that they have gotten away with what they did to their son, running away to protect themselves and never even trying to check to find out if Harry was ok. The three of them deserve to be punished in everyway possible. Harry doesn't need their help when it comes to Voldemort, Dumbledore is probably just going to try to get Harry to kill himself anyway. Outstanding new chapter! Can't wait for more!
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  • From ANON - autumngold on June 24, 2014
    Wonderful new chapter! My heart just breaks for Harry in your story! I am so glad that Dumbledore and the Potters are at least going to have to pay some fines to make up for their mistakes. For some reason though, knowing Dumbledore, I doubt if his manipulations are over. I hope he ends up in prison where he belongs. It has always disgusted me that he left a small child alone on a doorstep when it would have been so easy to just ring the doorbell. Excellent update! Can't wait for more!
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  • From history on June 07, 2014
    It's one of my fav chapter! I love how Sirius thought in this chapter of Harry and the relationship that he has with other and how they help him but he helps them and makes them change! I love Cissy here too!
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  • From Silverstargirl on June 07, 2014
    So glad that Harry came out of the surgery fine. Unfortunately, this is only just another step in the healing of his body with more surgery to come. The healing of his mind will take far longer....
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  • From Silverstargirl on May 24, 2014
    I think that Harry knows that Sirius wouldn't....not as Padfoot, at least,....but with his past, I guess it would still trigger bad thoughts. I do wish that James and Lily had been more open with their children (not including Harry in this term....they gave up their right to be his parents) about the true horrors that their 'brother' went through. No details, of course, but enough that they would understand that Harry really does have a right to act just the way he does toward their family. I hope, for their sakes, that they back the hell off....
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  • From history on May 21, 2014
    Thank you for the quick update!
    Is Harry a horcrux? I ask it because it looks as the unicorn focus a lot on his scar.
    I continue to love Bug
    I wonder why Harry can't take his potion. I wonder if some people compeled Harry to take drug..
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  • From ANON - snape_lust on May 06, 2014
    I am totally speechless at the levels of delusion the Potter's are living in, how they are utterly incapable of seeing the evil and frankly illegal crimes they committed towards their first born son. They seem to thing abandoning him is perfectly acceptable and can't understand the animosity.

    I was glad to see some movement on the Harry front. One can only read so much depression and refusal to get help, even when harry knows he needs help. I'm super curious about the unicorns and his scar. Is there some bad magic still there that severus, remus, lucius and probably dozens of healers didn't catch? Or are they trying to heal his psyche? Poor harry, somethings gotta give. he needs a breakthrough.
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  • From history on May 06, 2014
    Ah this chaapter is so cute! The begining was full of angst. And the unicorn were here and angst was not here. Bug+unicorn: too cute.....
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  • From Silverstargirl on April 19, 2014
    Got to love how James seems to want to refer to Harry as a brat, when it is Jamie who is one.... The three children that they raised are spoiled, overly sheltered brats. James and Lily both need to stop trying to protect their other children from the crime that they and Dumbledore committed all those years ago. No matter what they try to say, they abandoned their child. They chose to leave him behind...hell, they didn't even make sure that he made it into Petunia's home safely. And, even if he had, they obviously didn't care that he most likely wouldn't be well treated there. It's not like Lily wasn't aware of her sister's bad feelings toward magic and its users. Yet, they want Harry to just be accepting and happy that they are alive? Seriously? Pfft.

    I do hope that Severus and the others will figure out what's wrong with Harry soon. Lack of sleep can literally kill you.....
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  • From ANON - Mashkai on April 18, 2014
    Great update! Keep up the good work:)
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  • From ANON - Aots on April 09, 2014
    I'm really enjoying your story because you went in such a different direction with it. Most 'Harry wasn't found by Petunia' stories feature Harry living with a (loving) family. However this is probably one of the darker ones; it's reality shit happens to innocent, good people. Harry got the short end of the stick and didn't come out of it unscathed. He's working through his issues as best he can and now more shit is piling up and it's looking like he's boiling up to a melt down... I hope you'll be updating soon I really want to read this story to the end. I also can't wrap my head around Jamie; I want to sympathize with him because his life was also turned upside down but he is such an obnoxious, spolied brat it's hard. He doesn't want to understand, he just wants to be angry at Harry. Why James and Lilly didn't explain to their other children about what happened to Harry I don't know. Personally I'd rather my kids know from me instead of getting the info slapped to their face by someone else (and school is hell).
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  • From history on April 06, 2014
    I love your story! It is such a beautiful story! Some chapter makes me cry ( because they were beautiful). I like how you wrote Harry and all his problem ( i like that you describe all it happened to poor Harry too).
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  • From history on April 06, 2014
    I really like when Harry explain why he is with Sirius. It's one of the best thing that i read on this pairing.
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  • From history on April 06, 2014
    I like your story! I love Rufus here ( is he one of my fav character? Because i remenber seein him in another story. )I like how you write him here. I love bug ( i like how you use several animals as character).
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