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Reviews for The Returnof the Legendary Amarens

By : looonylei
  • From moodysavage on February 02, 2015
    oh no... please don't let the third mate be someone like lucius. That would be horrible.But I have no idea of who else it might be. Neville? Voldemort? (gads no)Is Sirius still alive? No they would have already reached their maturity. So that leaves Neville or someone else who hasn't reached the right age yet.
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  • From ANON - Higuchi_Neko on February 02, 2015
    You have a great story premise going here. It has a lot of potential. My one major critique would be grammar. You have a lot of spelling/word usage mistakes as well as past/present/future tense errors. These can easily be fixed, especially with the help of a beta. Do you have a beta? If not, I would be happy to help.
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  • From moodysavage on January 29, 2015
    Oh wow... now who could Ron and Hermione be grouped with... each other? I feel bad for Harry because he automatically thinks it's a horrible situation but I feel bad for Draco and Severus too because all they have right now is rejection and they don't know why. I also like the fact that even though Harry is the submissive he is still the strongest because he was able to see who they were even though they couldn't do the same. Interesting. I look forward to reading more.
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  • From ANON - staar on January 29, 2015
    Funny how you pegged the headmaster says some thing then runs !!!!!!!! yea ok Harry not happy here but he needs to get over it....Hermione and Ron are not going to be with him cause that's to much and don't like Ron in the mix there !!!! Thanks for the update !!!!
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  • From ANON - Emma Pressnell on January 29, 2015
    I love the plot!
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  • From Kain on January 28, 2015
    very interesting, curious to see where this goes. Are Hermione and Ron going to be submissive mates to anybody?
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  • From ANON - Jess on January 28, 2015
    Please edit your story.
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  • From ANON - Jess on January 17, 2015
    Please edit your story. At least read through it and clean it up a bit.
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  • From ANON - staar on January 16, 2015
    Love this so far ...hope to see more very soon !!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 16, 2015
    I love creature inheritance stories and think this one will not disappoint me. I can't wait to read more and thanks for sharing your story!
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  • From ANON - Nessie on January 16, 2015
    Looks like a promising story! If you ever need help with editing let me know and I'd be happy to take a look at things for you. :-)
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  • From SlythindorMalfoy on January 15, 2015
    This seems really interesting. Never heard of an Amaren before so excitedly looking forward to more. The fact that Harry is the sub only makes it better. :D I would recommend a beta though, you would gather a lot more readers that way. :)
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