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From ANON - zak, your sexy little geisha on May 27, 2005
Omg... I talked in the 3rd person... I do that regularly... like I'll tell myself to shut up if I'm singing or humming... but I try to not do it in reviews... I came back to see if anyone tried to top my review, no one can =P

Ok... so I just wanted to say... sorry for that... I messed that sentence up like some shit.

Heres what I MEANT to say

Have I ever told you that Ivan was my first and only shag? I let him take me from behind every time we had that foursome I was in the front of the train... Ivan behind me Pete behind Ivan and TREY in the back with a big vibrating bugplug up his ass... god we were yound and horny back then...

Not ZAK but TREY I mean... goodness that sentence was fucked up... sorry about that... I guess it was the pain pills for the tatoo I just got... (always blame it on the drugs) Okay... so... I'm sooooooooo sorry... I feel like a total moron... I don't diserve to be your "sexy little geisha" *crys*

I want Ivan... he would've pointed that out... come home already... I'm not going to cry... I'm not...

The problem is this time... he might have to pretend to be someones boyfriend... and have sex.... and... no I'm not crying... Im not going to... it's just I feel like he might develop feelings and... run away... he has cheated on me before with a woman. And he can have the family he wants with her... I'm sorry... I'll go now... I'm actually... crying over something that hasn't happened, yet. I have to stop crying so much...

~Zak
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From ANON - zak, your sexy little geisha on May 22, 2005
omg! Isn't the silver snitch like the best? Lets just say Ivan isn't at home right now so... I've been wanking quite a bit to certain *a-hem* stories and thoughts. It's sooo unfair! Ivan's gonna be gone for... for 3 weeks or more. I cried when he told me that. He said "I love you dear" and to "not forget him" or "shag Trey". Trey, funny guy, has always wanted to bugger me, he has a fetish... that I *cough* like to perform with Ivan... quite often. And lets just say... he walked in on us, he WAS one of our room mates. It was the four of us Trey, Pete, Ivan, and me. But now Ivan and I have an apartment. Ivan wants to adopt kids... I told him that I'm not ready... that... god if I were to have children they'd be whitnessing alot of sexin' and masterbation.

Back in the day I use to have foursomes with Trey, Ivan, and Pete... but then I settled for Ivan. Have I ever told you that Ivan was my first and only shag? I let him take me from behind every time we had that foursome I was in the front of the train... Ivan behind me Pete behind Ivan and Zak in the back with a big vibrating bugplug up his ass... god we were yound and horny back then... now I'm stuck with... Ivan *dies* just kidding. I love Ivan... God I love him to death.
Ivan hasn't been away from me for this long... and I just recently got a letter... from my parents... they disowned me... when... when they found out I was gay... I've read the letter so many times... they said that it was my "last chance to be part of the family" that if I didn't "atone for" my "sins now" I would "die a most painful death without family and burn in hell" Ivan was gone and... god I'm crying again... he couldn't comfort me. Ivan never had parents, but he understands me.

Okay enough sad talk *wipes eyes* this story is suburb. I like the color thing... yeah it's nifty.

I hope you continue soon... I can email Ivan... but I can't call (he's an under-cover cop) ... I... God if I ever... lose him... I'll be a sobbing misrable mess.
I guess my webcam will have to suffice... heh... he had to dye his hair a normal color though... it's a light chestnut color.

~Zak, your sexy little geisha =P

If you are intrested to know... I have purple hair, both nipples pierced, umm... several piercings that only Ivan will ever see (they hurt like hell when I got 'em), and some implanted things on my penis, I'm short... and I'm a sub... I'm a horny bastard (Ivan's called me one on several occassions), I use color contacts alot, but I like to wear my glasses too, I tend to wear weird clothes like dark colors and leather, and always stuff that's tight, I do wear bright rainbow stuff... but I like the color black. I always have my aids ribbon on my purse. Yes I have a man purse... and even worse I made it. It's bright colored has rainbows and stripes and it's got all sorts of crazy patterns it's awesome. I also have ... umm.... both ears peirced... I'm not your normal scientist. I have tatoos on my back and one of two naked men having sex tattooed on my... well... the place that pubic hair grows... I just got it. I got drunk with Pete about 4 days ago. I wanted to be the person who makes errotic toys for men and women but I thought that my parents would disown me... I hadn't told them about Ivan... so I just went into science and hoped for the best. So if you ever see or purchase a Zak's Toy Brand that'd be mine... but I think I'll stick with science so I'm not a total failure to my parents...

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From ANON - Kaitlin on May 21, 2005
I'm loving this story, all the little details are great, i love the mystry of it. I also like how you are writing the character. Please post again soon... definitly a story to continue and finish.
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From ANON - Shaddow on May 20, 2005
Took her long enough. Actually, when Sev and Remy were talking, I thought that Sev would say that he is Duncan's other father, and than Remus would slam him against a wall. Anyways, please update more, this story is addictive. What's the color for addiction?
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From ANON - antipyro on May 20, 2005
More, More, More, More, More Please!!!!

This is just getting good. Love the 'Duncan' role, it's so clever.

Please update soon.
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From foxracerchick129 on May 19, 2005
Ooh that was wonderful! I love it so! Cant wait for another update
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From ANON - Zak, just the gay guy & Ivan, Zak\'s other left hand on May 01, 2005
*squeals*

Omg... he actually squealed... like a little girl when he saw that you had replyed to the review... Like it was .... for fucks sake shut up Zak. He's currently on my lap (when is he not?) in nothing but a leather mini skirt. *coughs* lets just say his bits are falling out of the bottom. He's still spazing out... you see he's very happy today.

I SHAVED EVERYTHING

he's told everyone the today... the mail man...

I SHAVED EVERYTHING!

the girl next door

EVERYTHING I TELL YOU!

the kids in the park, and their mothers...

I SHAVED EVERYTHING! NO HAIR EXCEPT my nice purple mop.

You dyed your pubs purple too

Fuck, you did not just say that!

Yes I did, and it's true you dyed your pubs purple does that mean they are still there? Oh wait I can see all of you falling out of your skirt, definatly all purple hair is gone except on that pretty head of yours.

Ivan's leaving tomorrow for work, make him stay... and yes left-handed people do rule! *grins* Ivan's right handed but wanks with the left hand, I just am left handed. Ivan's just weird... oh god... fingers... wrap... oh fuck...

Before you say anything more Zak you've been hard for like forever... so it's my turn to talk. (Yes I am wanking him off and typing with my right hand) I honestly think I'm too comfortable with you, ms. author lady. i have to say that... zak here is getting his phd the little wanker is 29 years old, i'm 31... we are not old at all, but zak is freaking out because he's gonna turn 30 soon. haha. if zak knew i told you our age he'd be pissed. we don't live in the dorm, that is just what i've grown to call our bedroom because the first time we had sex was in the dorm and i was always like, ''lets go to the dorm now zak'' back in the old days that was our code for ''sex, i want some''. hehe, sooo thus ... this... has occured. zak is at my hand... he was so proud that he had taken the time to shave and wax everything. he doesn't like hair unless it's on your head. he doesn't like stubble and has forced me many times to shave my attempted patch of facial hair i grow on occasion. he only likes my blue hair. i don't dye my pubs though... honestly i have no idea why he did that... hold on I need to clean up the sofa... Zak kinda passed out... he was tired he stayed up all night writing and waxing/shaving.

I honestly think he got bored of writing his thesis (perhaps that's why he dyed his pubs that one day?). I dunno if he's going to finish it, he said he's "Fed up" and that he's "tired of stupid science"

Bah, he's just bitching.

Oh and good story (lol it's like an after thought, but truely the story is interesting!). I shall sign Zak's name...

~Zak, just the gay guy (Can you believe that he's getting his PhD? As sex obsessed as he is?)
-Ivan, Zak's other left hand (hehe, I like the name *winks* )
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From ANON - akuma_river on April 28, 2005
heh. kawaii.
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From ANON - Papaya on April 23, 2005
Very good update! I really like the color-correspondence thing, and am looking forward to seeing how it plays out. Poor Severus, about to get the happiness he never wanted! The whole stages of acceptance thing is very appropriate: his old life is dying and he has to mourn it before he can enjoy his new one. Looking forward to the next update! As always, thank you for the wonderful entertainment and please update soon.
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From foxracerchick129 on April 23, 2005
Yay! An update! lol, I loved that chapter! But something wierd happened to me when i was reading it

" Denial, Anger, Bargaining, Depression, and Acceptance" Thats so wierd DABDA , I had a teacher that taught us that, I swear i almost wet myself when i read it, lol. How did you know DABDA?

Loved it! Hope for another update soon! - Jessica
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From ANON - Zak, just the gay guy on April 13, 2005
haha! You don't have any ideas how much you've mades me giddy.

That was improper english Zak

Shut it. Before I was rudly intrupted! You are awesome, hahahaha, but I have to say you have to get Harry and sev to shag.

Is that all you have on your mind?

Yes

Why did I even ask

Not that you mind I mean look at you, all nude.

Only because when I got home you, the fool, tore all my clothes off and ruined my favorite pair of jeans

So? What's wrong with them? Now we can have sex easily because the front part is torn off.

Zak! It's the fact that you asulted me at the door, I still had my suitcase in my hand.

Shut up! You had all those hot Japanese men around you for a few days and what did I have? My left hand.

You know that I don't fool around with other men Zak. Or have you forgotten our small illegal wedding?

Of course I remember it Ivan! I love you, I just hate your job.

Well to fucking bad, I'm a package deal here.

And quite a package you have too, mmm-hmmm must say that when you shave it's an even better ride.

Zak I'm leaving now, get off my lap. Your being to open about our relationship

But darling! Love! Stop trying to get up, love...

Get up

Shhh...

GET UP

Ivan...

Zak please...

Ivan listen I didn't mean it, Ivannnn. I love you, of course you wouldn't cheat on me. And our relationship isn't based on sex, it's just an added feature. Deary you know that I love you. What would I do without you?

You'd have quite a good relationship with your left hand, you weirdo.

I LOVE YOU SWEETY

Don't call me sweety

I LOVE YOU HUNNY CAKES

WTF? Hunny cakes? What have you been smoking? You haven't done drugs since we were kids.

Don't say that. I feel old

I dont' think old is when you are t-

Don't say my age, I feeeeel old when you say it.

Shhhh, love, I am two years your senor and we aren't old until we reach twenty years older then what we are at the time.

Oh, that was tricky! You sly boy. So when we are 100 we won't be old till 120 and 101 = 121?

Oh not only is he good looking but he's intelligent *pats Zak's head*

Wrong head, you need to pat the one that is shaven.

ZAK!

What? *looks innocent*

Get up now and take me to the dorm, I haven't had sex in so long.

But I just masterbated like 1 and a half hours ago.

You fool you can get it up still as if you were still 17 even if you are t-

DON'T SAY IT

Fine love, but you have to promise me TWO things

*Anything* Ivan, my master

First say I'm sorry and bye to miss. author lady nicely then bend the fuck over.

I'm sorry for the vulgar comments. BYE!

~Zak, just the gay guy
-Ivan
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From ANON - moondancer on April 13, 2005
Hi!
A wonderful story! I hope that Severus will soon come around with the fact of him becoming a father. Please continue soon!!
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From ANON - ella on April 12, 2005
your story is wicked it's so funny i couldn't stop laughing at the thought of snape calling dumbledore 'dumblee' please update soon, ella xxxxxxxxxxx
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From ANON - Remus\'s Girl on April 12, 2005
Very VEry good please write the next chappter soon!!
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From ANON - antipyro on April 10, 2005
Great story line.

The imagination of Duncan and Harry's bright world is fantastic. I can't seem to help wondering why Severus and Harry can't 'feel' each other more, kinda like a 6th sense thing.

Nice long chapters too, Hmmmm.

Lots of confections and plot bunnies your way.

Post sooon, this can only get better, in so many ways. Characterisations are excellent too.
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